Imitation is one of the human being's strong asset, which displays through the learning process from people surrounding us every day. While I accept that friends have a tremendous impact on one's personality development, I believe that family and teacher are also the incredible sources of inspiration for the young.
On the one hand, making friends is considered an important decision since this would have either benevolent or adverse effects on young people. If we hang out with people with great personalities and talents, they would be a profound source of motivation for us to become a better person. For example, in school, under-performing students are normally paired up with high-achieving ones so that they would receive better assistance in study and get inspired from their friends. On the flip side, many juvenile criminal and drug related cases have been recorded due to peer pressure, which proves that bad habits would also be acquired through friendship. The young often want to gain approval and trust from their friends by mimicking their behaviors, even the bad ones like smoking cigarettes.
On the other hand, family plays a pivotal role in molding young people's characters due to several aspects. Firstly, parents are probably the first friends that we have made and shared our lives with since the time of our birth till teenage's time. Hence, children spend majority of their time with their family and thus probably acquire a lot of traits from their parents like sleeping habits and language commands. Secondly, the offspring may look up to their father and mother as their role models in life and a great source of inspiration. For example, children with parents working in performing arts industry would grow up following their mother or father to the theater and start cultivating the passion for arts. Not only does this experience give them a profound inspiration, but it also sets a sound foundation for their future career goal of becoming artists.
In conclusion, it is certainly true that youngsters acquire some characteristics from their friends who they mingle with. However, I tend to support the idea that parents and teachers still play an equal role in nurturing and defining one's personality.
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...an equal role in nurturing and defining ones personality.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, hence, however, if, look, may, second, secondly, so, still, thus, while, for example, in conclusion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 10.4138276553 154% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 24.0651302605 145% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 52.0 41.998997996 124% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1883.0 1615.20841683 117% => OK
No of words: 365.0 315.596192385 116% => OK
Chars per words: 5.15890410959 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37092360658 4.20363070211 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68183494905 2.80592935109 96% => OK
Unique words: 215.0 176.041082164 122% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.58904109589 0.561755894193 105% => OK
syllable_count: 561.6 506.74238477 111% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 23.6338739948 49.4020404114 48% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 125.533333333 106.682146367 118% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.3333333333 20.7667163134 117% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.66666666667 7.06120827912 137% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 8.67935871743 161% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.220971299221 0.244688304435 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0778500207302 0.084324248473 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.049429445617 0.0667982634062 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.13302963643 0.151304729494 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0478243024368 0.056905535591 84% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.0 13.0946893788 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 50.2224549098 111% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.94 12.4159519038 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.72 8.58950901804 102% => OK
difficult_words: 90.0 78.4519038076 115% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 9.78957915832 153% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.7795591182 139% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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