Some think that developing a successful career is more important than spending time with family and friends, while others disagree. Discuss both views and give our own opinion.

Recent decades have witnessed that human needs to search for a perfect job oppourtunity to survive in the modern society .It is believed by some people that getting a better job is the most essential thing rather than socialising with family members and companions.In my opinion the time spent with family and friends is more valuable as now will be discussed in this essay.

In general, there is a number of requirements that need to be considered to seek advancement in our career.Putting a lot of hardwork is an important crieteria to achieve in our work place.Having the ability to balance the personal and professional wellness requirements could be another reason for developing a successful job.By doing a job that is honest and ethical which uphold the company's values and morals one can obtain a well satisfied job with attractive salaries.eventually this leads to self satisfaction and a well sophisticated life.

In contrast, life spent with friends and relatives would become more enjoyable thus leads to happy and healthy life.Great motivation in the hard times would be obtained by the support who is around us ,it may be either a friend or a particular family member who is very attached to our emotion.To illustrate, the care given by a mother when a child is in hard times like illness is a measure to show how important the relatives are.

In addition, companions are also an inevitable part of one's life. Friends means laugh and fun, sharing personal opinions, tackle with troubles which are the most essential part in our lives to get rid of unwanted pressure.Having a wonderful family which makes the living enjoyable and stressfree is also leads to a great success in career life.

In conclusion, while it is important to improve and succeed in career spending time with our love ones provide a person peace of mind ,that is also an essential factor to achieve in job.

Votes
Average: 7.8 (1 vote)

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, if, may, so, thus, well, while, in addition, in conclusion, in contrast, in general, in my opinion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 13.1623246493 160% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 17.0 24.0651302605 71% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 41.998997996 112% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1599.0 1615.20841683 99% => OK
No of words: 320.0 315.596192385 101% => OK
Chars per words: 4.996875 5.12529762239 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.22948505376 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.96099480485 2.80592935109 106% => OK
Unique words: 182.0 176.041082164 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.56875 0.561755894193 101% => OK
syllable_count: 504.9 506.74238477 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 6.0 16.0721442886 37% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 53.0 20.2975951904 261% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 159.625342599 49.4020404114 323% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 266.5 106.682146367 250% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 53.3333333333 20.7667163134 257% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 17.3333333333 7.06120827912 245% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 20.0 5.01903807615 398% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.223138587954 0.244688304435 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.105547390594 0.084324248473 125% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0599742228582 0.0667982634062 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.123788481778 0.151304729494 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0431799584725 0.056905535591 76% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 28.8 13.0946893788 220% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: 17.68 50.2224549098 35% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 13.0 7.44779559118 175% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 24.0 11.3001002004 212% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 12.61 12.4159519038 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.02 8.58950901804 117% => OK
difficult_words: 76.0 78.4519038076 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 30.0 9.78957915832 306% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 23.2 10.1190380762 229% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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