Studies suggest that the rise in the consumption of junk foods is the major cause of obesity. Some people argue that this problem can be tackled to a great extent by increasing the price of food items. Do you agree or disagree?
Many people think that the rising cause of obesity is due to eating fast food but others think that increasing obesity problems can be resolved by changing the real price of the food items. In my opinion, I agree with the idea of inflating the cost of such commodities to deal with obesity and the supporting points will be discussed in the subsequent paragraphs.
To begin with, the affordability of junk food is the major concern which is leading to obesity. Firstly, fast food in the markets is now available at very low prices which are easily accessible by the children and adults. People prefer to eat this food in the markets instead of eating healthy food. The only solution to deal with this is to increase the price of items twice to the real price. For instance, if Burger is available at Rs 200, increasing its price to Rs 400 will think people to invest this bucks in the healthy food instead of buying the only burger.
Besides, artificial sweeteners in junk food are also a concern. Not only, the consumption of fast food products is the only reason to increase the food price but also there is some food which has some artificial sweeteners in soaring amount. This type of food helps in accumulating excess fat in the liver which in later stages lead to obesity due to abnormal metabolism. Inflating the amount of these products will lead to less consumption. For example, the survey done by the Indian Times newspaper has shown that children who are eating junk food which has artificial sweeteners are obese at the age of 15.
In conclusion, to tackle with this, high prices can be an effective way to discourage the consumption of fast foods. In fact, if countries put this idea into practice, there will be fewer fat people around.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, first, firstly, if, so, for example, for instance, in conclusion, in fact, in my opinion, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 13.1623246493 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 10.4138276553 38% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 13.0 24.0651302605 54% => OK
Preposition: 54.0 41.998997996 129% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1454.0 1615.20841683 90% => OK
No of words: 309.0 315.596192385 98% => OK
Chars per words: 4.70550161812 5.12529762239 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.1926597562 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.51295696603 2.80592935109 90% => OK
Unique words: 150.0 176.041082164 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.485436893204 0.561755894193 86% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 446.4 506.74238477 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.60771543086 87% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 5.43587174349 37% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.7609038487 49.4020404114 87% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.857142857 106.682146367 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.0714285714 20.7667163134 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.78571428571 7.06120827912 124% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.4128256513 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.360080994103 0.244688304435 147% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.12759419478 0.084324248473 151% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0774734893235 0.0667982634062 116% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.214075573524 0.151304729494 141% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0270491047792 0.056905535591 48% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.8 13.0946893788 90% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 66.07 50.2224549098 132% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 11.3001002004 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.04 12.4159519038 81% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.05 8.58950901804 94% => OK
difficult_words: 65.0 78.4519038076 83% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 9.78957915832 148% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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