There is an increasing amount of advertising directed at children, which
encourages them to buy goods such as toys and snacks. Many parents are worried that these advertisements put too much pressure on children, while
some advertisers claim that they provide useful information to children. Discuss both views and giveyour opinion
Nowadays, due to burgeoning technological advances, youngsters are exposed to lots of commercials that persuades them to buy goods. What are the implications?. Some parents are concerned that these promotions mount pressure on their children while the advertisers claim that they provide crucial information to minors. Let us examine both views and proffer my opinion before reaching a concrete decision.
Undoubtedly, exposing children to adverts have certain drawbacks and parents are worried about them. Firstly, it makes children to become consumerist. To illustrate, exposing juveniles to certain adverts can make them to show over possessive attitudes. For instance, these days adverts on toys are common. Children persuade parents to get them such items without thinking of the financial burden it have to their parents. Consequently, commercial could lead to gluttony. Children believe in what the see on television promotions not minding the dangers involved. For example coca cola adverts are deceptive and this might lead to gluttony on such products hence chronic complications that can result from gluttony such diabetes and high blood pressure arises.
Conversely, promoters advocates that they provide useful information to children through advertisements because certain adverts are educative. Some adverts educates minors on how to become good statesmen and how to practice good hygiene. For instance, the popular food brand Moko spranga promotes good hygiene cultures in juveniles. Furthermore, commercials can be used to create awareness on the essense of vaccination to children. To illustrate, most parents get to know about the importance of vaccine through the media. A recent publication on the New york time magazine has shown that information on polio and malaria vaccines spread faster through television adverts. By and large, commercials educates and help to create awareness on importance of vaccination.
From my perspective, I believe that commercials are important however certain advertisements mount pressures on parents therefore, government should put checks to monitor and curtail irrelevant adverts.
To recapitulate, the expansion in technology has made adverts to become ubiquitous. It mounts pressures on parents because it makes children to become consumerist and to result to gluttony. However promoters claims adverts is useful because it is educative and can be used to create awareness. I reiterate my opinion that commercials are important and that government should check and curtail irrelevant ones.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, conversely, first, firstly, furthermore, hence, however, so, therefore, while, for example, for instance, by and large
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 10.4138276553 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 24.0651302605 129% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 58.0 41.998997996 138% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.3376753507 144% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2183.0 1615.20841683 135% => OK
No of words: 379.0 315.596192385 120% => OK
Chars per words: 5.7598944591 5.12529762239 112% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.41224685777 4.20363070211 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.02530730977 2.80592935109 108% => OK
Unique words: 200.0 176.041082164 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.527704485488 0.561755894193 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 684.0 506.74238477 135% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.60771543086 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 16.0721442886 149% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.2975951904 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 41.8396409587 49.4020404114 85% => OK
Chars per sentence: 90.9583333333 106.682146367 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.7916666667 20.7667163134 76% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.5 7.06120827912 78% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.01903807615 100% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.9879759519 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 3.4128256513 176% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.230917735056 0.244688304435 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0608083843556 0.084324248473 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0655307144238 0.0667982634062 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.13098960587 0.151304729494 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.043562812885 0.056905535591 77% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.6 13.0946893788 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 39.33 50.2224549098 78% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.83 12.4159519038 127% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.05 8.58950901804 105% => OK
difficult_words: 112.0 78.4519038076 143% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 9.78957915832 61% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.1190380762 79% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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