You are going on a monthly training program in the UK and know that the head of the course would like one of the participants to be the social events' organizer.
Write a letter to the Training Organiser. In your letter
• expressing your interest in the role
• requesting more information about it
• explaining what experience you have
Begin your letter as follows:
Dear ...,
Dear Sir or Madam,
I am writing this letter to express my interest in the role of social events' organizer which you want for your next month's training program in the UK.
My firm has sent me an invitation to join your Advance Oracle Learning Training Program in the UK. After hearing an invitation from the HR of my company, I got excited about the abroad training program where I will get to learn the technological advancements with Oracle's Database Product. Also, I was overwhelmed after hearing the news that you want a social event organizer from your training program as your training school organizes an event for all participants after completion of training. Therefore, I would like to extend my interest in this role because I am a part-time party planner for corporate events.
If you will consider me as an organizer for your upcoming event, I would request you to please share detailed information on my company's email id which you will find in your database. My registration ID is ORA2344. Please include the dates, venue, time, and strength of participants in this event.
I have been planning events for almost a decade during my high school time. I have planned music events, corporate events, and farewell events in the past ten years of my life. Besides, I know how to make the audience entertaining with various activities such as dance, singing, competitions and many other things. Thus, I have enclosed the appreciation letters from my customers whose parties I have hosted. I hope you will find the relevant information about my experience in planning and handling all events.
I am hoping for you to consider me as an organizer for your upcoming social event.
Yours faithfully,
Shain
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 19, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing this letter to express my i...
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Line 3, column 71, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'events'' or 'event's'?
Suggestion: events'; event's
...press my interest in the role of social events organizer which you want for your next ...
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Line 5, column 72, Rule ID: AFFORD_VBG[1]
Message: This verb is used with infinitive: 'to train'.
Suggestion: To train
...on to join your Advance Oracle Learning Training Program in the UK. After hearing an inv...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, if, so, therefore, thus, well, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 3.0 13.1623246493 23% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 10.4138276553 48% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 46.0 24.0651302605 191% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 34.0 41.998997996 81% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.3376753507 120% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1440.0 1615.20841683 89% => OK
No of words: 290.0 315.596192385 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.96551724138 5.12529762239 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.12666770723 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75401339395 2.80592935109 98% => OK
Unique words: 155.0 176.041082164 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.534482758621 0.561755894193 95% => OK
syllable_count: 446.4 506.74238477 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 5.43587174349 258% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 1.0 4.76152304609 21% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.4047022482 49.4020404114 108% => OK
Chars per sentence: 96.0 106.682146367 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.3333333333 20.7667163134 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.53333333333 7.06120827912 50% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.67935871743 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.331976922267 0.244688304435 136% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.112991873874 0.084324248473 134% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.116170873368 0.0667982634062 174% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.225491796421 0.151304729494 149% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.14562680824 0.056905535591 256% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.6 13.0946893788 89% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 50.2224549098 121% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 11.3001002004 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.55 12.4159519038 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.55 8.58950901804 100% => OK
difficult_words: 73.0 78.4519038076 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 9.78957915832 148% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.