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The desire for success has permeated every realm of human life ranging from childhood to adulthood. This success term for parents simply translated to have more thriving children. Presently, everybody knows there is nothing way but having a good education for children to meet this dream. Although people have a unanimous consensus about the significance of the blossom of children for their parents, there is a controversy surrounding the how much time the parents consume for their children learning. Many claims that traditionally people are less involved in the education of their people, while others disagree. From my vantage point, I firmly agree with this statement that people are more involved in the training of their kids, by far. In the following paragraphs<I express two conspicuous reasons to elaborate on my standpoint.
First and foremost, these days parents have more free time. In the past people had so many problems regarding their daily life; they had much trouble to find good food and meet their other trivial needs. On the other hand, thanks to the advanced technology, every human can meet these needs effortlessly. In this way, they have more time to think about the other aspects of life including their children training. This more free time affords people to spend a great deal of their time for this goal. For example, I can remember when I was a child; my father was too busy to think about my education. This was not exclusive to me; my other friends also have the same situation. In contrast, I have a regular time during the week which I teach my son, and I evaluate his performances repeatedly. This example embodies nowadays, people take more seriously their children education rather than past, perfectly.
In the second place, parents are more aware of the importance of the education. Traditionally, a very little portion of people attended schools or universities, that's why so many people were oblivious to the fact that education can pave the way for kids to have a very better future. In contrary, we all understand that most of the people are successful, achieve the best positions because of good education background. Internet and other media continuously show the brilliant people who graduated from good universities. A case in point, two years ago, my father when was watching one of this shows, looked at me and said you should send your child to the best schools. My father was the man who did not care about my training at all, said this sentence! This example illustrates the people presently are more aware of the value of the training and therefore, more engaged with their children training.
In the final analysis, based on the reasons have been mentioned above, parents are more involved in their children education not only because do they have more free time but also because they have more knowledge about the significance of the learning in the future of their kids. If you cast doubt on my reasons, I will invite you some night to see my father and my son. It will clear up your doubts, totally, I bet!
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- Agree/Disagree:It's better for children choose jobs that are similar to their parent' jobs than to choose job that are very different from their parents' jobs. 73
- If people have the opportunity to get a secure job, they should take it right away rather than wait for a job that would be more satisfying 73
- Young people nowadays do not give enough time to helping their communities 73
- TPO 25 80
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 437, Rule ID: THE_HOW[1]
Message: Did you mean 'how'?
Suggestion: how
...nts, there is a controversy surrounding the how much time the parents consume for their...
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Line 2, column 443, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to people'
Suggestion: to people
...n training. This more free time affords people to spend a great deal of their time for...
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Line 3, column 162, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: that's
...eople attended schools or universities, thats why so many people were oblivious to th...
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Line 4, column 417, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...l clear up your doubts, totally, I bet!
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, look, regarding, second, so, therefore, while, as to, for example, in contrast, in the second place, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 64.0 43.0788530466 149% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 66.0 52.1666666667 127% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 8.0752688172 186% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2551.0 1977.66487455 129% => OK
No of words: 521.0 407.700716846 128% => OK
Chars per words: 4.89635316699 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.77759609229 4.48103885553 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.61129316219 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 257.0 212.727598566 121% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.493282149712 0.524837075471 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 792.9 618.680645161 128% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 19.0 9.59856630824 198% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.94265232975 202% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6003584229 121% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.5909003406 48.9658058833 111% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.04 100.406767564 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.84 20.6045352989 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.6 5.45110844103 103% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 18.0 11.8709677419 152% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0 0.236089414692 0% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0 0.076458572812 0% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0737576698707 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0 0.150856017488 0% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0645574589148 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.1 11.7677419355 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.14 10.9000537634 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.63 8.01818996416 95% => OK
difficult_words: 99.0 86.8835125448 114% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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