The ability to maintain friendships with a small number of people over a long period of time is more important for happiness than the ability to make many new friends easily.
Friends are an essential element in one's development throughout his life. Whether the ability to maintain friendships with a small number of people over a long period is more important for happiness than the ability to make many new friends easily can be weighted in many aspects. From my perspective, I do not concur with the statement that maintaining long-term friendship is more important. I will discuss the reasons below.
First of all, when the ability to maintain long-term friendships transcends the importance of making new friends, people may easily fall into intransigent and narrow scope. For example, the contemporary world is in a fast pace, and innovations and progress happen every second. People with long-period friendships usually share the same values and notions. After all, it is human instinct to find people possessing the same ideas and interact with them without any conflict. However, people will stick to a certain way to perceive the events happening around them and become stubborn inadvertently. Therefore, it is critical for people to cultivate the ability and mind to step out of their comfort zone, meeting various people with different values and backgrounds.
On the other hand, the ability to make many new friends is also crucial to people's happiness. It is especially in a scenario when staying in a strange environment. For example, students attending universities invariably study out of their hometowns, with little knowing about the new environment and people around them. If people can make friends readily, they will reduce the sense of anxiety and keep their mind healthy. On the contrary, when students have less ability to meet new friends, they will find themselves hard to adapt to a new environment. Eventually, those students will feel frustrated in university life and even affect their academic performances. Consequently, making new friends also plays an important role in keeping people happy.
To sum up, the statement is not as persuasive as it stands. Based on my expositions mentioned above, making new friends easily can broaden the horizons and reduce anxiety in a new environment.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 37, Rule ID: ONES[1]
Message: Did you mean 'one's'?
Suggestion: one's
Friends are an essential element in ones development throughout his life. Whethe...
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Line 1, column 124, Rule ID: SMALL_NUMBER_OF[1]
Message: Specify a number, remove phrase, use 'a few', or use 'some'
Suggestion: a few; some
...he ability to maintain friendships with a small number of people over a long period is more impor...
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Line 3, column 666, Rule ID: ADMIT_ENJOY_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the gerund form: 'mind stepping'.
Suggestion: mind stepping
...for people to cultivate the ability and mind to step out of their comfort zone, meeting vari...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, consequently, first, however, if, may, second, so, therefore, after all, for example, first of all, on the contrary, to sum up, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 11.0286738351 36% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 21.0 43.0788530466 49% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 52.1666666667 94% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1813.0 1977.66487455 92% => OK
No of words: 343.0 407.700716846 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.28571428571 4.8611393121 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.30351707066 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.88225119106 2.67179642975 108% => OK
Unique words: 187.0 212.727598566 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.545189504373 0.524837075471 104% => OK
syllable_count: 552.6 618.680645161 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.6714494023 48.9658058833 85% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.4210526316 100.406767564 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.0526315789 20.6045352989 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.94736842105 5.45110844103 146% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.523636622217 0.236089414692 222% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.140906807587 0.076458572812 184% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.179570013031 0.0737576698707 243% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.318497265614 0.150856017488 211% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.185494096592 0.0645574589148 287% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.5 11.7677419355 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.11 10.9000537634 120% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.67 8.01818996416 108% => OK
difficult_words: 90.0 86.8835125448 104% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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