Advertisement of product has a crucial impact on our life, espeacialyon kids, whether Television advertising towords kids between (2 to 5) years old should allowded or not, this can be weighed in differint aspects, in my opinion I concur with the statment that we should scure these advertisements from our young children,
Admittly. advertising is an important for custemers to verify products, therefore some believe that the advertising should be allowed. In this essay I will elaborate on a coupl reasons to explain my point of view.
First , and foremost, introduce these advertisements in television ruin our kids behavior, this is mainly due to the fact that, by doing this, a large number of kids will watch these TV commercials as a result , they will be enforced their parent to buy these products especificly candy, and as we know how this type of food is unhealthy, take example from my real life, when my son was watching his favorit movei, he saw advertising about snak (Ms&Ms), however he insisted to purchase this snaks tevery day, therefore this habit harm his health,because he used to eat unhealthy food, and dose not eat fruit and vegetables. moverover this behavoar increase the effort on parent to buy things that are not nesessary from their point of view, this example illustrate that televesion advertising have a negative effect not only on kids but also on their parent.
In addition, television advertisings have a big influncial effect on our children behave, sunce kids in this age learn from what they see and hear, and because of that advertisment some time intruduce products which are not suitible for this age, like ciggeret, in addition to types of cloths, furthermore, these advertisement interrupt them during their watching,and this is obiviously explain the detrimental effect of these advertisement on adult and kids enjoyable time when they are watching
To sum up, this statment that television commercial in as persuasive as it stands, based on expoitions mentioned above, like these advertisement ruin our kids behavour and detrement their watching on television.
Advertisement of product has a crucial impact on our life, espeacialyon kids, whether Television advertising towords kids between (2 to 5) years old should allowded or not, this can be weighed in different aspects, in my opinion I concur with the statment that we should secure these advertisements from our young children,
Admittedly. advertising is an important for customers to verify products, therefore some believe that the advertising should be allowed. In this essay I will elaborate on a coupl reasons to explain my point of view.
First , and foremost, introduce these advertisements in television ruin our kids behavior, this is mainly due to the fact that, by doing this, a large number of kids will watch these TV commercials as a result , they will enforce their parent to buy these products specifically candy, and as we know how this type of food is unhealthy, take example from my real life, when my son was watching his favorite movie, he saw advertising about snacks (Ms&Ms), however he insisted to purchase this snacks every day, therefore this habit harm his health,because he used to eat unhealthy food, and dose not eat fruit and vegetables. moreover this behavior increase the effort on parent to buy things that are not necessary from their point of view, this example illustrate that television advertising have a negative effect not only on kids but also on their parent.
In addition, television advertisings have a big influential effect on our children behave, sinnce kids in this age learn from what they see and hear, and because of that advertisment some time intruduce products which are not suitible for this age, like cigarette, in addition to types of cloths, furthermore, these advertisement intrupt them during their watch and this is obviously explain the detrimental effect of these advertisement on adult and kids enjoyable time when they are watching
To sum up, this statement that television commercial in as persuasive as it stands, based on my expositions mentioned above, like these advertisement ruin our kids behavir and detriment their watching on television.
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also, but, first, furthermore, however, if, moreover, so, therefore, in addition, as a result, in my opinion, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 56.0 43.0788530466 130% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 47.0 52.1666666667 90% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1767.0 1977.66487455 89% => OK
No of words: 343.0 407.700716846 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.15160349854 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.30351707066 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.95603008131 2.67179642975 111% => OK
Unique words: 196.0 212.727598566 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.571428571429 0.524837075471 109% => OK
syllable_count: 547.2 618.680645161 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 6.0 20.6003584229 29% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 57.0 20.1344086022 283% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 241.609475992 48.9658058833 493% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 294.5 100.406767564 293% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 57.1666666667 20.6045352989 277% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 19.8333333333 5.45110844103 364% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 19.0 5.5376344086 343% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 11.8709677419 25% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.450367666489 0.236089414692 191% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.24322975915 0.076458572812 318% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.21781395322 0.0737576698707 295% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.290019248039 0.150856017488 192% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.219723147974 0.0645574589148 340% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 31.4 11.7677419355 267% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: 13.62 58.1214874552 23% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 14.6 6.10430107527 239% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 25.5 10.1575268817 251% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 13.48 10.9000537634 124% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.24 8.01818996416 128% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 86.8835125448 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.5 10.002688172 155% => OK
gunning_fog: 24.8 10.0537634409 247% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 26.0 10.247311828 254% => The average readability is very high. Good job!
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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