agree or disagree one should start doing a secure job compared to waiting for a satisfied job
The time one spends on work is one the most crucial periods in life; as it can lead one to feel happy and satisfied and shape the ensuing life. Hence, one of the most controversial issues among many people is whether to find a secure income or to wait for the dreamy occupation. As far as I am concerned in the state of ambivalence, I might lean toward waiting for the preferred job. Conceivably, many people believe that one should start a job as soon as possible, however, many reasons such as the promotion chances and mood enhancement can declare a higher beneficiary of neglecting a non-satisfactory work. I will declare my statement in the following essay.
First, promotions are advantageous parts of a job due to the satisfaction included in them. Better job positions can help to broaden the happiness and enrich one's life. To receive a promotion one needs to work with enjoyment and motivation for a long time in a work-place. Feelings such as satisfaction, responsibility, etc. are paramount for a promotion and one can not hold such feelings doing a normal job. Granted, a secure job leads to a secure income for a period, but better positions lead to more amount of money. As an illustrative example, some years ago when I was working at our company in Japan there was a co-worker named Sara, Sara entered the company at the age of 30. In the beginning, everyone assumed no improvement for her career along with a low income, but it was not true. Fortunately, Sara who was waiting for this position for a long time paved the steps faster than anybody and became our boss in less than two years. Sara's career path was meant to be dark, but loving her job she gained all the successes. As one can see, the amount of enjoyment influences the probability of promotions which associates with income.
It is not presumptuous to judge one's mood regarding perceived enjoyment. No man can truly state that a person who loves his occupation enjoys his life the most, but it is evident that people who are happier tend to enjoy their work time the most. A man who always laughs at home might have experienced a great day at the office that is relevant to his work-satisfaction. My personal experiences are the foundation of my next point. The more one is satisfied with his job the more he is happy and it contributes to his level of relaxation. Surely, it is wiser to wait for a dream job than to neglect personal preferences and be always tensed at work.
I am of the conviction that one needs promotions and a great mood to enjoy life. It is my personal suggestion and its effects are apparent in the amount of income and the tension decreases. Regarding the aforementioned reasons, I conclude that it is a better choice to wait for the job than doing any secure job, but a coin has two points and an edge to connect them, there are cases when one can not survive without an income and such situations should be considered, as well.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, hence, however, if, regarding, so, well, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 15.1003584229 159% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 13.8261648746 145% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 40.0 43.0788530466 93% => OK
Preposition: 55.0 52.1666666667 105% => OK
Nominalization: 21.0 8.0752688172 260% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2427.0 1977.66487455 123% => OK
No of words: 526.0 407.700716846 129% => OK
Chars per words: 4.61406844106 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.78901763229 4.48103885553 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.81432592198 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 250.0 212.727598566 118% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.475285171103 0.524837075471 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 784.8 618.680645161 127% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6003584229 121% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.2402143947 48.9658058833 107% => OK
Chars per sentence: 97.08 100.406767564 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.04 20.6045352989 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.4 5.45110844103 44% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 11.8709677419 143% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.322753926046 0.236089414692 137% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0901120948945 0.076458572812 118% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0802330229203 0.0737576698707 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.213927061272 0.150856017488 142% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0589522336105 0.0645574589148 91% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.8 11.7677419355 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 58.1214874552 101% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.46 10.9000537634 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.01 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 111.0 86.8835125448 128% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.002688172 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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