Arts or athletics
For the past centuries, art has steadily developed and gained attention from public. But the governments only concentrate on supporting such area as athletics instead of art. In my point of view, it's better for governments to provide art with more allowance for following reasons.
To begin with, many artists can't enhance their capacity in art area because the shortage of money. Some people are gifted at doing some genres of art but it's arduous for them because they only have an amount of money to afford their daily life. For example, one of my friends was an artist, he had potentials in art and he was really attempted to achieve his targets. However, the cost of drawing materials was so exorbitant that he couldn't charge for them. After a period of time, he conceived that he should give up this career since it was too arduous to continue.
In addition to this, even though arts have its reputation for a long time ago, it can't attract eye sights from governments. They almost recognize the importance of athletics and they try to have improvements in this facet. It's time for governments to change their view toward art to make a bigger step in this area.
Finally, people in today's world have made change in their standard of living, so it's essential for them to enjoy kinds of entertainment which derive from art. Governments should investigate in art and give this facet chance to dramatically develop. Then, the life of their citizen will be satisfied contributing to the growth of the whole country. Take an example of myself, whenever I was under pressure because of the loads of work, I constantly went to observe an exhibition. Those pictures had palmed a lot and made me feel free from busy life. The next day, I effectively work with an energetic body and mind which increase the ability to handle issues at workplace.
To sum up, governments need to encourage the work of art by providing allowance.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you mean 'cants'?
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Message: This word is usually spelt together: 'eyesights'.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, however, if, really, so, then, as to, for example, in addition, to begin with, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 15.1003584229 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 4.0 11.0286738351 36% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 39.0 43.0788530466 91% => OK
Preposition: 59.0 52.1666666667 113% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1596.0 1977.66487455 81% => OK
No of words: 334.0 407.700716846 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.77844311377 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.27500489853 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.62977896172 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 197.0 212.727598566 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.589820359281 0.524837075471 112% => OK
syllable_count: 503.1 618.680645161 81% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 22.842996063 48.9658058833 47% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 88.6666666667 100.406767564 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.5555555556 20.6045352989 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.66666666667 5.45110844103 104% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.260107810521 0.236089414692 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0871850981887 0.076458572812 114% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0841923316199 0.0737576698707 114% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.166203273414 0.150856017488 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0804818601712 0.0645574589148 125% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.4 11.7677419355 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 58.1214874552 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.44 10.9000537634 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.22 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 86.8835125448 90% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.