Because people are busy doing so many different things, they do very few things well.
Without a shodow of the doubt, nowadays, people have a lot of tasks to do, and doing these tasks properly has effects in their lives. Many people contend that that regardles of doing a lot of things people can do their task well, while others assert that people do just of few of them well. Both of opposing arguments appear to be somewhat convinsing and stand to point. However, my personal experience and actual observation of live have led me to agree that people just do very few of their tings in an apropriate way. In ensuing lines, I delve into two reasons to substantiate my point.
First, currently, in modern society people have a lot of roles to do. Because of the variety of tasks they can not do all of them well. By having a lot of works to do, people choose just few of tghem to being expert in them. For example, consider a family that in that family a mom that have two kids have to work. The time that the mother can spend for her children is little. So, this mum can not be with her kids in comparison with a full time mom. As you can see some times, we can not manage our tasks in order to doing them perfectly.
Second, nowadays, people prefer to use expert people to do their works instead od doing themselves. There are a lot of expert people for doing different works. So, we can use from these skilled person and save our precious time. For instance, in my country there is a website that a lot of freelancers have profile on that site, and they all have skills in different area. When we need a especial ability we just search on that site and choose a suitable person. I think in this way we not only use our work better but also we can save our time for do other things.
In a nutshell, based on what I see in my society, I agree that people perform few things well because of two important reson. Firs of all their duties are a lot. In addition there are expert people that they are available for doing works by paying mony. Also by using these people they can save time for doing other works. I hope someday people can do their roles well. Because if we do not perform well in our tasks, our country will destroy.For having and improved country we have to do our works well, even we have just one work to do.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 155, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: that
...cts in their lives. Many people contend that that regardles of doing a lot of things peop...
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Line 2, column 70, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Because” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...ciety people have a lot of roles to do. Because of the variety of tasks they can not do...
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Line 2, column 437, Rule ID: EN_COMPOUNDS
Message: This word is normally spelled as one.
Suggestion: fulltime
...t be with her kids in comparison with a full time mom. As you can see some times, we can ...
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Line 3, column 386, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
... skills in different area. When we need a especial ability we just search on that...
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Line 4, column 165, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[2]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: addition,
... Firs of all their duties are a lot. In addition there are expert people that they are a...
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Line 4, column 254, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Also,
...ailable for doing works by paying mony. Also by using these people they can save tim...
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Line 4, column 443, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: For
... in our tasks, our country will destroy.For having and improved country we have to ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, second, so, well, while, for example, for instance, i think, in addition
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 62.0 43.0788530466 144% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 59.0 52.1666666667 113% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1819.0 1977.66487455 92% => OK
No of words: 427.0 407.700716846 105% => OK
Chars per words: 4.25995316159 4.8611393121 88% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.54576487731 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.17237826605 2.67179642975 81% => OK
Unique words: 187.0 212.727598566 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.43793911007 0.524837075471 83% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 569.7 618.680645161 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.51630824373 86% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 35.095900362 48.9658058833 72% => OK
Chars per sentence: 75.7916666667 100.406767564 75% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.7916666667 20.6045352989 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.29166666667 5.45110844103 79% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.88709677419 205% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.390690299652 0.236089414692 165% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.12684559483 0.076458572812 166% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.108230291249 0.0737576698707 147% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.267553090302 0.150856017488 177% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0703767865769 0.0645574589148 109% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 7.5 11.7677419355 64% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 79.6 58.1214874552 137% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.4 10.1575268817 63% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 7.13 10.9000537634 65% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.96 8.01818996416 87% => OK
difficult_words: 67.0 86.8835125448 77% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 10.247311828 68% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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