Because the world is changing so quickly, people now are less happy or less satisfied with their lives than people were in the past
There are many arguments about whether people who are living in the past were happy or people who are living today. Some people think that people living today are happier than before. They believe that todays advanced technology makes people life easier, thus people become happier. Although I understand their point of view, I have a different opinion. I believe that people who were living in the past were happier than today's people. The basis of my opinion is social and financial.
From a social perspective, people who were living in the past were more socially active than people today. For example, in the past, life was simple and easy, people did not had a lot of responsibilities. I remember my grandfather and grandmother life, they always invited us to their home every weekend to enjoy the time with them and with our cousins. I remember that my grandmother cooked delicious food on that day for us. My grandfather took us to the back yard and played with us. He organized for that day and he had a lot of fun stories to tell them to us. On the other hand, our life today are so busy. Personally, I do not have time to stay with my kids and talk to them as my parents and grand parents did to me. Even for my children it is better for them to stay at home not to go out side with us. They enjoy playing with their tablets and I phones rather than sitting at the end of the day and talking to us. I think the past simple life was happier than today busy life that keep all the family members apart.
Financially, people in the past did not have to work for longer hours to get more money. Todays people have a lot of responsibilities that required them to work for long time during the day and even sometimes they work during the week ends. Todays people are very busy to collect more money to pay their mortgages. They have to pay for the car, the house, and even if they want to go for a vacation they should work for longer hours before or after the vacation to accommodate their needs. However, people in the past were living an easier and simpler life. Every thing was cheap, they did not have to worry about any mortgages. I remember that my grandmother and my grandfather were living in a very simple home. My grand mom was taking care of some chickens and ducks, she backed the bread at home. How a happy and simple life they were living.
In conclusion, for the reasons I mentioned above, I think that people in the past were happier than todays people . The easy and cheap life allowed people to socialize and communicate freely. Moreover, people did not have to worry a bout gathering money to leave well.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, moreover, so, thus, well, even so, for example, i think, in conclusion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 15.1003584229 139% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 9.8082437276 10% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 13.8261648746 145% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 64.0 43.0788530466 149% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 68.0 52.1666666667 130% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2217.0 1977.66487455 112% => OK
No of words: 495.0 407.700716846 121% => OK
Chars per words: 4.47878787879 4.8611393121 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.71684168287 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.36756994711 2.67179642975 89% => OK
Unique words: 209.0 212.727598566 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.422222222222 0.524837075471 80% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 684.0 618.680645161 111% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 16.0 9.59856630824 167% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 29.0 20.6003584229 141% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 31.5107893494 48.9658058833 64% => OK
Chars per sentence: 76.4482758621 100.406767564 76% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.0689655172 20.6045352989 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.51724137931 5.45110844103 65% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 21.0 5.5376344086 379% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 21.0 11.8709677419 177% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.271830848888 0.236089414692 115% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0949270319604 0.076458572812 124% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0903818480294 0.0737576698707 123% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.210623057964 0.150856017488 140% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.067079620766 0.0645574589148 104% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.2 11.7677419355 70% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 71.14 58.1214874552 122% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 10.1575268817 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.41 10.9000537634 77% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.71 8.01818996416 84% => OK
difficult_words: 70.0 86.8835125448 81% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 10.002688172 60% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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