Describe an annual day in your country when you give people special gifts
Because of the diversity, Indonesia has a lot of religious holidays that people celebrate. However, the holiday that I look forward to the most is Eid Al Fitr. Eid Al Fitr is an event to celebrate the end of Ramadan, where Muslims all around the world fast for a whole month. I would spend this holiday with my big family. Aunts, uncles, cousins, and many more relatives are going to show up. Moreover, there are a lot of things that you can anticipate from Eid Al Fitr.
In the morning, my family and I will go to the mosque to do our Eid prayer. Since the prayer would last for more than one hour, it could be boring. After its done, we would go home and enjoy the delicious foods. It is undeniable that the only thing that people do on Eid is eating. Since the purpose of this holiday is to be happy, eating is the most suitable activity as it brings joy to all of us. In a day, I could eat around 4-5 times. My mother and my grandmother would cook and filled the dining table with amazing foods.
However, there is one more activity that everyone looks forward to on Eid, which is receiving money. Older people from your family usually give you money as a reward for fulfilling Ramadan. You could receive money from 10-12 people on Eid. Therefore, Eid is famous for producing rich people in a day. For instance, I have a lot of uncles and aunts that give me money every Eid. The amount of money is not that much. Nevertheless, I could get around 2 million rupiah every Eid.
Personally, Eid Al Fitr is an exciting event. Receiving money is part of the reason why I love this holiday. However, I will also look forward to spending time with my family. The memories I make will be unforgettable and cherished for the rest of my life.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 108, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[8]
Message: The proper name in singular (Older) must be used with a third-person verb: 'peoples'.
Suggestion: peoples
...on Eid, which is receiving money. Older people from your family usually give you money...
^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, however, if, look, moreover, nevertheless, so, therefore, for instance
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 38.0 43.0788530466 88% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 52.1666666667 73% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 8.0752688172 12% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1422.0 1977.66487455 72% => OK
No of words: 325.0 407.700716846 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.37538461538 4.8611393121 90% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.24591054749 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.33904041418 2.67179642975 88% => OK
Unique words: 169.0 212.727598566 79% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.52 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 452.7 618.680645161 73% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 13.0 20.1344086022 65% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 20.7665178566 48.9658058833 42% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 59.25 100.406767564 59% => More chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 13.5416666667 20.6045352989 66% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.16666666667 5.45110844103 58% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 11.0 4.88709677419 225% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.101873966224 0.236089414692 43% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0328581814325 0.076458572812 43% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0485842775674 0.0737576698707 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0604318135755 0.150856017488 40% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0447840455388 0.0645574589148 69% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 6.0 11.7677419355 51% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 75.2 58.1214874552 129% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.0 10.1575268817 59% => Flesch kincaid grade is low.
coleman_liau_index: 7.53 10.9000537634 69% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.86 8.01818996416 86% => OK
difficult_words: 53.0 86.8835125448 61% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.2 10.0537634409 72% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 10.247311828 68% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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