Despite health warnings, a large number of people continue to smoke all over the world. Why should we be concerned about this? What solutions would you suggest? Use specific reasons and examples in your opinion.
In the past, tobacco was invented as a herb to cure certain diseases, but today, people use it for enjoyment. A high quantity of nicotine can bring numerous health issues. Tobacco addiction not only brought health problems, but also financial problems as well. According to me, tobacco is also affecting the youth of our nation because of that we should be concerned about this problem, and we should find a solution as well. I will elaborate on my reasons in the ensuing paragraphs.
First, smoking not only an active smoker, but it also affects the passive smoker as well. The individual, who inhale smoke not from the cigarette, but from the air those called as “passive smokers”. According to research statistics, the chances of suffering from health problems for passive smokers are higher compared to an active smoker. Additionally, smoking can cause various health diseases such as cancer, heart disease, and other serious illnesses. Many youngsters become victim of these diseases. The decreasing number of youth should be a concern for society because youth is the future of society. Young generation smoke cigarettes sometimes as fashion or sometimes they do it under peer pressure. Sometimes parents set a bad example for their children by smoking in front of them. All mentioned reasons attract the young generation towards addiction of nicotine.
Second, to solve nicotine addiction, the government should increase the tax on nicotine products. Because of the high price, fewer people would be able to afford to buy these products. Moreover, the government should prohibit smoking in public places that lead to a reduced number of passive smokers. In addition, the government should make a strict amendment about the person who can buy nicotine. For example, the youngster who is below 18 should be not allowed to buy it. Similarly, for pregnant women, it should ban to buy nicotine because the child would have to suffer from the withdrawal symptoms after birth. Further, the government should also help a person who wants to come out of the addiction by providing require counseling and treatment. The government should concern about the smoking issue because the government spends a lot of money on hospitals and organizations to save people from their addictions. This money could be spent on providing food to needy people, research, public service, education, etc.
Let’s put in a nutshell, tobacco is highly affecting the youth of society. Based on that I strongly believe that it should be our concern to reduce tobacco addiction. Government and individual of society, both can help in solving the problem by prohibiting smoking in public and funding organizations.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 262, Rule ID: ACCORDING_TO_ME[1]
Message: This phrase can sound awkward in English. Consider using 'in my opinion' or 'I think'.
Suggestion: In my opinion; I think
...s, but also financial problems as well. According to me, tobacco is also affecting the youth of...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, moreover, second, similarly, so, well, for example, in addition, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 19.0 9.8082437276 194% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 27.0 43.0788530466 63% => OK
Preposition: 57.0 52.1666666667 109% => OK
Nominalization: 19.0 8.0752688172 235% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2270.0 1977.66487455 115% => OK
No of words: 435.0 407.700716846 107% => OK
Chars per words: 5.2183908046 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.56690854021 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77293603667 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 226.0 212.727598566 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.519540229885 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 693.9 618.680645161 112% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 9.59856630824 31% => OK
Article: 10.0 3.08781362007 324% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 1.86738351254 321% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 20.6003584229 126% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 29.9075745882 48.9658058833 61% => OK
Chars per sentence: 87.3076923077 100.406767564 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.7307692308 20.6045352989 81% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.46153846154 5.45110844103 64% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.85842293907 207% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.213380863836 0.236089414692 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0559114167719 0.076458572812 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0433935442432 0.0737576698707 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.126402150456 0.150856017488 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0417652100847 0.0645574589148 65% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.5 11.7677419355 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 58.1214874552 95% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.7 10.9000537634 117% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.68 8.01818996416 108% => OK
difficult_words: 117.0 86.8835125448 135% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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