Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Advertising is the most important cause of unhealthy eating habits.
In the contemporary world, there is no doubt that advertisement has a significant influence on people's behavior and decision making, especially about food. Nevertheless, the controversial question which arises here is that whether it is the most potent cause for people's unhealthy eating habit or there are other justifications for this phenomena. As far as I am concern, advertisement merely is not the most important cause. In the following paragraphs, I will elaborate on my viewpoint.
First and foremost, the way children raise and how parents educate them to develope a healthy food habit is an essential factor of having a healthy or unhealthy diet. In other words, if parents teach their children of having a healthy nutrition plan and inhibit them from having low-nutrition dense foods, they will learn how to have a healthy diet. As a case in point, I had a friend whose mother did not usually cook food and they used to consume fast-food most of the time. She grew up without proper education about food and nutrition, hence, she had an unhealthy food habit. Had her parents taught her to eat healthy food, she would be aware of having a healthy food diet.
The second and equally important reason is that in today's world, due to the hectic and demanding lifestyle, people do not have time to prepare food and they get encouraged to consume unhealthy food as a result. In other words, considering people do not have sufficient time to cook, they tend to consume frozen and prepared food or fast-food which does not take a lot of time. For instance, I used to work for eight hours in an architectural firm. Then I used to go to the gym after work and buy a sandwich or a snack on my way home since I did not have time to make food.
In conclusion, all the enumerated reasons above converge to the point that advertisement solely is not the reason for people's unhealthy eating. Although there is no doubt advertising could have its effects on people, there are more significant prompts such as how individuals grow and how aware they are about healthy food. Besides, the hectic lifestyle demands people to invest less time making food and encourage them to be inclined to fast-food or prepared food.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, first, hence, if, nevertheless, second, so, then, for instance, in conclusion, no doubt, such as, as a result, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 13.8261648746 130% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 29.0 43.0788530466 67% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 52.1666666667 84% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1837.0 1977.66487455 93% => OK
No of words: 383.0 407.700716846 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.79634464752 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.42384287591 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73164454875 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 189.0 212.727598566 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.493472584856 0.524837075471 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 575.1 618.680645161 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.902546552 48.9658058833 90% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.8125 100.406767564 114% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.9375 20.6045352989 116% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.375 5.45110844103 154% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.125207831753 0.236089414692 53% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.052308546044 0.076458572812 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0513675937271 0.0737576698707 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0968701482817 0.150856017488 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0757339707354 0.0645574589148 117% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.1 11.7677419355 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 58.1214874552 97% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.86 10.9000537634 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.62 8.01818996416 95% => OK
difficult_words: 69.0 86.8835125448 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.002688172 120% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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