Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
After completing high school, students should take at least a year off to work or travel before they begin studying at a university.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
In today’s modern life, there always has been a controversial topic among people around the notion of whether students should continiue their education after their graduation from high school or not. In this regard, some people are of the opinion that is it not neseccary for students to work or gain experience before attending to university and college. however, I pesonally subscribe to the view that it is better for students to do not go to university immidiately after high school. In the following paragraphs, my reasons will be elaborated on this issue in more detail.
To begin with, they should gain experiences because they can find better carrer in their future life. Generally speaking, students with higher developed skills, which makes as result of having work experience, are more capable to handle different situation. To be more specific, they learn to intract with different individuals such as their boss or their coworkers. therefor, they become able to developed their personal skills. Needless to say, employers always look for those individuals being tallented in communication. my brother’s experience drives this notion home. When he had finished his high school, he worked in my fother’s shop. he had a co worker who did not take responsibility of any thing. Apart from that, my father expected his son to work better than others. Although it provided lots of pressuer to him, finally he learned how he could manage the situation and which way is the best to communication with his coworker and his boss. All in all, now, he works for a huge marketing business, which was not possibe for him to hire there if he could not gain this experienc.
Another reason is that sometimes students cannot realize what interests they should follow for their futur life. In fact, there are not able to recognize whcih talents they have and should be experts on this. working before attentding to university helps individuals to distingushe their real interests in comparison to real world. For instance, I do love to be a jornalist, however, I found out that I could not study in this mager because I worked for a newspaper, and I underestood this majer is not match with my personality. therefore, I realized that we should chose our major wisely, based on our abilities. Had I had not obtaied this experiment before going to university, I might have been ruined my life because of being unrealistic.
Drawing upon the reasons that I mentioned above, I do believe that students should not attend universityies after high school. Not only do job experience play a crucial role in their progress, but they also underestand what their real talents and interestsa are, which paves the way of success for them.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, however, if, look, so, therefore, apart from, for instance, in fact, such as, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 71.0 43.0788530466 165% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 61.0 52.1666666667 117% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2279.0 1977.66487455 115% => OK
No of words: 456.0 407.700716846 112% => OK
Chars per words: 4.99780701754 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.62105577807 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76674700764 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 246.0 212.727598566 116% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.539473684211 0.524837075471 103% => OK
syllable_count: 706.5 618.680645161 114% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 9.59856630824 156% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.596937153 48.9658058833 87% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.0869565217 100.406767564 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.8260869565 20.6045352989 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.82608695652 5.45110844103 89% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.193551473071 0.236089414692 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0618136865626 0.076458572812 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0496345953945 0.0737576698707 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.138013435309 0.150856017488 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0319812905761 0.0645574589148 50% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.0 11.7677419355 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 58.1214874552 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.72 10.9000537634 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.25 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 106.0 86.8835125448 122% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 83.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25.0 Out of 30
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