Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
After high school, students should have at least one year to work or travel. It's better than attending university straight away.
Contemporary educators and parents have realized the importance of setting a goal in students' life, which is hugely significant for those who have graduated from high school. When it comes to their future development plans, some people believe that students should go to college as soon as they graduate from high school. On the contrary, I assert that traveling or working for a year may help prepare students for the university.
First, by traveling, students are capable of broadening horizons, which contributes to their future study and work. To be more specific, for students who have finished high school education, they were busy preparing the college Entrance Test, so that they have little chance to visit tourist attractions. however, there exists some knowledge which cannot be learned from books. Only after stepping on tourist attractions can one fully immerse himself in its real cultural surroundings. For example, visiting the Statue of Liberty in the U. S. after high school, I learned American's love and desire for freedom. I have indeed learned these from a history textbook, but one is the dull words, and another is the right feeling. after that travel, I made my mind one day I will go to the United States to chase for a job as I favor the free atmosphere there. Supposing after graduation, I stayed at home and have nowhere to go; I would end up with continuing a bachelor study in China as peers did. but now, I have started a fresh new journey in my life. Consequently, even a journey after high school is worthwhile, not to mention spending a whole year traveling, which I cannot imagine how huge the benefits it will bring to us.
Moreover, starting a job to see the realistic environment in society helps students figure out what skills and knowledge they need to learn in the future. No one can deny the fact that cooperation and communication are of great significance in this modern society. however, a first-year student could hardly realize this is important since they have no experience working with colleagues. they have learned from high school that they are immersing themselves in textbooks, memorizing the rigid points, and solving dull mathematical equations. In contrast, working in a company, even as an intern, enables students to share and learn relevant information they have got from different sources and personal perspectives, which is conducive for promoting a critical mind. Besides, through the brainstorming and exchanging brilliant ideas, students are capable of developing communication skills, which will be a treasure in their whole life.
In conclusion, from the reasons and examples above, I would reiterate my view that working or traveling for a year before entering the college is beneficial because it helps foster a broader outlook of this world and stimulate students to learn more.
- Do you agree or disagree after high school graduates should take at least one year off to work or travel before entering university 78
- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement After high school students should have at least one year to work or travel It s better than attending university straight away 90
- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement the most important problems of society can be solved during our life time 87
- It is easier to be well educated today than it was in the past 81
- it is better to travel to foreign countries when you are young than when you are older 90
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, but, consequently, first, however, if, look, may, moreover, so, while, for example, in conclusion, in contrast, on the contrary
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 44.0 43.0788530466 102% => OK
Preposition: 57.0 52.1666666667 109% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.0752688172 161% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2396.0 1977.66487455 121% => OK
No of words: 469.0 407.700716846 115% => OK
Chars per words: 5.10874200426 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.65364457471 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.81432447608 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 258.0 212.727598566 121% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.550106609808 0.524837075471 105% => OK
syllable_count: 738.9 618.680645161 119% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.7173037331 48.9658058833 104% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.095238095 100.406767564 114% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.3333333333 20.6045352989 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.47619047619 5.45110844103 119% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.228945368173 0.236089414692 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0710555285616 0.076458572812 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0396330006959 0.0737576698707 54% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.148270164075 0.150856017488 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0464565060334 0.0645574589148 72% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.8 11.7677419355 117% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 58.1214874552 85% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.65 10.9000537634 116% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.53 8.01818996416 106% => OK
difficult_words: 113.0 86.8835125448 130% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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