Do you agree or disagree with the following statement After high school students should have at least one year to work or travel It s better than attending university straight away

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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? After high school,
students should have at least one year to work or travel. It's better than
attending university straight away.

Throughout history, students being under a chronic pressure in educational systems without experiencing the real world. These stresses can cause the most problematic issues in society which lead to different mental health conditions like social anxiety. Some people are inclined toward the opinion that students should not waste their time and they should enter academic medium immediately, whereas others hold exactly the opposite perspective. I personally contend that it is necessary for students to take some time off for themselves after high school. Three conspicuous reasons will cogently illustrate this perspective.
The first exquisite point to be mentioned is that, it is subtle that people that avoiding stressful environment are happier. There is no doubt being away from academic media would reduce pressure from students. If students want to have a vibrant life in future, they need to settle their minds before entering university. Meanwhile they can travel to be more relaxed. One of the drawbacks of entering academic environment instantly after high school is depression. As an illustration, take the example of one of the students at my university which she was an astute student and studied so hard to enter the best university in iran, but as soon as she entered to a new and bigger environment of the university she got depressed and could not find any meaning in her life anymore and as a consequence of her mental health, she committed suicide just after one semester, which was a big shock for us.
Another reason which should be taken into consideration is that most of the students do not have enough knowledge about what they want in life. One of the advantages of not attending university straight away and get a job or travel, would let them figure out their interests and make up their minds about their future. Generally speaking, there is a myriad professions in the world, which students can survey most of them to ascertain their favorite. In this case, some might find it meaningless to take academic courses. Besides, they find other ways to persuade their dreams. Taking my experience as an instance, I choose chemical engineering when I entered university, due to my high scores, and to be honest I did not have any perspective about this field and then after 3 years I figured out that I like computer engineering instead of chemical engineering and it was too late to change my field.
The last but not the least point to mention is that a major part of human’s life is based on experiences. All failures and successes that each one gain in life are the most worthwhile experience that they carry within themselves. Students which choose to get a job or traveling instead of attending university right after high school graduation can explore real life better and experiencing every bit of their moment which would led them to know their inner conscious. As a result, they can use these experiences later on at university. Psychologists have conducted many studies on first year students at university which indicated that those students that took at least one year off from studying were more mature and enthusiastic compare to others.
To wrap it all, all the aforementioned information lead us to an undeniable fact explaining that taking at least one year off right after high school graduation would let students to be happier and mature in different aspects. The whole essay was the story in a nutshell. In fact, there are a myriad of other reasons, supporting the above statement, which could be mentioned but are not embraced due to the dearth of time.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 251, Rule ID: IN_PAST[1]
Message: Did you mean: 'in the future'?
Suggestion: in the future
...If students want to have a vibrant life in future, they need to settle their minds before...
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Line 2, column 322, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Meanwhile,
...their minds before entering university. Meanwhile they can travel to be more relaxed. One...
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Line 3, column 358, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'profession'?
Suggestion: profession
.... Generally speaking, there is a myriad professions in the world, which students can survey...
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Line 5, column 294, Rule ID: THERE_RE_MANY[3]
Message: Possible agreement error. Did you mean 'myriads'?
Suggestion: myriads
...ory in a nutshell. In fact, there are a myriad of other reasons, supporting the above ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, but, first, if, so, then, thus, whereas, while, as to, at least, in fact, no doubt, as a result

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 27.0 15.1003584229 179% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 9.8082437276 173% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 13.8261648746 137% => OK
Relative clauses : 23.0 11.0286738351 209% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 63.0 43.0788530466 146% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 87.0 52.1666666667 167% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.0752688172 173% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3009.0 1977.66487455 152% => OK
No of words: 602.0 407.700716846 148% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.99833887043 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.95335121839 4.48103885553 111% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76511220757 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 295.0 212.727598566 139% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.490033222591 0.524837075471 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 945.0 618.680645161 153% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6003584229 121% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 88.1954556652 48.9658058833 180% => OK
Chars per sentence: 120.36 100.406767564 120% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.08 20.6045352989 117% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.16 5.45110844103 76% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.85842293907 207% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.256620839323 0.236089414692 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0622347262411 0.076458572812 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0598467656936 0.0737576698707 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.149782891171 0.150856017488 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0444604863799 0.0645574589148 69% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.2 11.7677419355 121% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 58.1214874552 81% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 10.1575268817 125% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.02 10.9000537634 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.39 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 136.0 86.8835125448 157% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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