Some people believe that parents should set strict rules to their children if they want them to succeed in the future. I also agree to this idea that parents should educate their children correctly with consistent rules. I have two reasons why I support this idea as below.
First, children need parents’ strict guide to have good habits such as getting up early, bowing to old people, brushing teeth well, and so on. Normally, children are reluctant to keep even these simple rules by themselves, so parents should force them to keep these rules for raising good habits which can lead them to future success. For example, my wife get up at 4 am every day and she starts her working earlier than others. Now she is respected as a diligent and passionate teacher.
Second, current competition to enter good universities is so severe and some children have to prepare it from elementary school. However, kids do not know what to do and how to do for their future life. Therefore, parents should coach their children intensively in this case. For instance, my daughter wants to be a doctor in Korea, but medical school needs high GPA, AP Chemistry & Biology scores, fluent English ability, leadership in school and other medical related voluntary activities and so on. For preparing above, my daughter wants me to set up a master plan to just follow.
To sum up, parents should help their children with strict rules for raising good habits and winning the severe competition for their future success. In this regard, I agree to the idea that parents should guide their children strictly if they want them to succeed in the future.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 585, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...to set up a master plan to just follow. To sum up, parents should help their chi...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, second, so, therefore, well, for example, for instance, such as, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 15.1003584229 26% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 11.0286738351 36% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 35.0 43.0788530466 81% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 52.1666666667 71% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1360.0 1977.66487455 69% => OK
No of words: 280.0 407.700716846 69% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.85714285714 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.09062348924 4.48103885553 91% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.40744108892 2.67179642975 90% => OK
Unique words: 157.0 212.727598566 74% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.560714285714 0.524837075471 107% => OK
syllable_count: 405.0 618.680645161 65% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.6003584229 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.4372621785 48.9658058833 99% => OK
Chars per sentence: 97.1428571429 100.406767564 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.0 20.6045352989 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.5 5.45110844103 138% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.273333024352 0.236089414692 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.102300462153 0.076458572812 134% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0738245096273 0.0737576698707 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.188284202803 0.150856017488 125% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0757216706028 0.0645574589148 117% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.5 11.7677419355 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 68.1 58.1214874552 117% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.91 10.9000537634 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.84 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 57.0 86.8835125448 66% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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