Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The consumption of foods and drinks high in salt and sugar causes harm to people's future health, so government should tax these foods to reduce their sales.
Our health is the most precious asset of our life, so it should be our highest priority. However, nowadays, most people neglect their health and incline towards consuming unhealthy food. In this regard, some people contend that government should impose taxes on unhealthy foods, so that it may deter public from eating food that is unhealthy for our body. But, personally, I believe this taxation wouldn’t be as effective as expected. This is due to two major reasons, which I will be discussing in the following paragraphs to substantiate my stance.
First, increasing taxes on food items would not create much distinct difference in reality. The increased cost of goods in this scenario would be little because the government is unable to impose taxes on a high level due to the negative impacts on all other consumable food stuffs and the food-selling enterprise. Hence, due to this people will continue to consuming them. To elucidate this further, children are good example for this situation. As they are unaware of derogatory effects of eating junk food, they wouldn’t stop having these types of foods and its increased price wouldn’t concern them a lot.
Second, in the recent years, our lifestyle has become more sedentary, due to which we hardly have much time to go to the kitchen and cook healthy food. Instead, for our own ease, we prefer to grab processed or packaged food. For instance, we always like to have soft drinks which are having high sugar content, in combination of with snacks. Therefore, it is less likely that we will be discontinuing this habit even if these products are taxed.
In conclusion, I would reaffirm my point that taxing foods that are harmful for our health will not be useful at all. This is because people would not deter from consuming these unhealthy food stuff as they wouldn’t consider their higher prices and are highly dependent on easily accessible items, which is difficult to change now. Consequently, due to the aforementioned reasons I believe that this taxation strategy is not a wise choice.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
... food-selling enterprise. Hence, due to this people will continue to consuming them....
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, first, hence, however, if, may, second, so, therefore, for instance, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 13.8261648746 43% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 48.0 43.0788530466 111% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 52.1666666667 71% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1719.0 1977.66487455 87% => OK
No of words: 344.0 407.700716846 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.99709302326 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.30665032142 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65056188365 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 190.0 212.727598566 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.552325581395 0.524837075471 105% => OK
syllable_count: 519.3 618.680645161 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.1317082639 48.9658058833 96% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.117647059 100.406767564 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.2352941176 20.6045352989 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.94117647059 5.45110844103 109% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 11.8709677419 51% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.85842293907 207% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.228182703909 0.236089414692 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0743965553836 0.076458572812 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0540810092259 0.0737576698707 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.145312643881 0.150856017488 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0263584087069 0.0645574589148 41% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.2 11.7677419355 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.72 10.9000537634 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.25 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 86.8835125448 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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