Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The extended family (grandparents, cousins, aunts, and uncles) is less important now than it was in the past. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Indeed, in the past, people's lives were more chaste and simpler than today's people, so they may have more time to communicate with their extended families, and such a fact may mislead some impressionable individuals to generate the idea that the extended family is more significant in the past than now. However, as far as I am concerned, I tend to claim that this extended family is more important now.
In the first place, nowadays, the development of science and technology, such as cell phones, wireless communication technology, and the Internet, promote communication between members of the extended family, which helps people build strong and warm kinship. By contrast, people in the past, had few methods can be used to contact members of the extended family. Furthermore, these convenient communication methods are beneficial for family members to help each other in time. For example, a person today can quickly get needed messages from her family members through a phone call, just a few seconds. However, people in the past had to cost a half-day to finish the same thing without cell phones. Thus, it is these convenient telecommunication tools that make the extended family becomes more important now.
What is more, as the job competition becomes more and more fierce, nowadays, people gradually realize the importance of the interpersonal relationship including the relationship with extended family. Take the case of my friend Ann who wanted to buy a big house but she did not have enough money. However, her cousin Lily successfully run a company and earned a lot of money. When Lily knew that Ann lacked a part of the money to buy the house, Lily borrowed her money immediately because Lily trusted her very much. As a result, Ann succeeded in buying a big house. Had it not been for her cousin's help, she would never be able to buy this big house quickly.
Nevertheless, a voice arises that nowadays, the relationship with the extended family already becomes weak because people have no time to communicate with them in this busy society. Ironically, nowadays, the development of technology is more convenient for modern people than people in the past to communicate with their extended families, which brings more chances to build strong kinship with the extended family than people in the past.
In conclusion, based on the reasoning above, I strongly maintain that the extended family is more important now than in the past.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, furthermore, however, if, may, nevertheless, second, so, thus, for example, in conclusion, such as, as a result, what is more, in the first place
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 43.0788530466 65% => OK
Preposition: 53.0 52.1666666667 102% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2054.0 1977.66487455 104% => OK
No of words: 406.0 407.700716846 100% => OK
Chars per words: 5.05911330049 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.48881294772 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.80913462672 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 201.0 212.727598566 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.495073891626 0.524837075471 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 651.6 618.680645161 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 69.7175219867 48.9658058833 142% => OK
Chars per sentence: 120.823529412 100.406767564 120% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.8823529412 20.6045352989 116% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.23529411765 5.45110844103 169% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.186317693167 0.236089414692 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0701983233136 0.076458572812 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0669373089646 0.0737576698707 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.141374721753 0.150856017488 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0683525067849 0.0645574589148 106% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.3 11.7677419355 122% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 58.1214874552 83% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.36 10.9000537634 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.69 8.01818996416 96% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 86.8835125448 86% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 20.0 10.002688172 200% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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