Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The extended family (grandparent, cousins, aunts, and uncles) is less important now than it was in the past. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
The family has a significant impact on each one’s life. Humans gain their lives’ abilities through families. Some people believe that, nowadays, extended family is much more important than in the past, while others hold precisely the opposite perspective. I firmly believe that it is clear people do not attend to have extended family, so it becomes less important than before. I will clarify my viewpoint in the following paragraphs.
First, nowadays, most people are independent not only financially but also socially. Independent people seek privacy; in extended families, there is no such thing as privacy. Generally speaking, invasion of privacy is joint in huge families, but in the nuclear family, the only focus is on the success of each member. My experience can be a suitable example; when I lived with my parents, sisters, and grandparents, they made my life unbearable; whenever I wanted to go out, I should have asked permission from everyone. These kinds of environments, under constant supervision, would bring misery and loss of freedom.
Secondly, entertainment is one staple need in society that was not common years ago. Today, instead of family gatherings, people can use different means to spend their time. With the advent of new entertainment and technology, it is observable that family tradition, especially in extended families, is about to extinct. For instance, spending time in cafes, restaurants, amusement parks, movies, concerts, and so on had been a replacement for family meetings. The fast-paced evolution of the world has affected these traditions and weakened families’ bonds for the past few decades.
Lastly, it should not be neglected that in the past, people were closer, and they share their joys and sorrows together. Family members supported each other through every thick and thin. Through association with those being meaningful to each other, they could achieve a sense of security, love, acceptance, companionship, and personal worth. According to a recent study, children in large families that had unlimited support in unexpected situations could make a positive emotional connection with others when they grew old. So, in large families, emotional attention has a prominent role in people’s lives, bringing success and happiness to their lives.
In conclusion, there are many crucial factors about extended families that can be examined. Nevertheless, science and development of the world made this need for an extended family less rather than past.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, lastly, nevertheless, second, secondly, so, while, for instance, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 43.0788530466 74% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 52.1666666667 100% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.0752688172 161% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2121.0 1977.66487455 107% => OK
No of words: 392.0 407.700716846 96% => OK
Chars per words: 5.41071428571 4.8611393121 111% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44960558625 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.88437166577 2.67179642975 108% => OK
Unique words: 238.0 212.727598566 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.607142857143 0.524837075471 116% => OK
syllable_count: 657.0 618.680645161 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 39.5978753917 48.9658058833 81% => OK
Chars per sentence: 96.4090909091 100.406767564 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.8181818182 20.6045352989 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.54545454545 5.45110844103 83% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.17469041359 0.236089414692 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0491239719656 0.076458572812 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.045188470471 0.0737576698707 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.104886838964 0.150856017488 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0552280723526 0.0645574589148 86% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.0 11.7677419355 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.76 58.1214874552 79% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.8 10.9000537634 127% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.35 8.01818996416 117% => OK
difficult_words: 121.0 86.8835125448 139% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 10.002688172 60% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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