Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
If people have the opportunity to get a secure job, they should take it right away rather than wait for a job that would be more satisfying.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer
Work plays an essential role in our life. A job not only helps us to achieve the success in our life but, also ensures that we are not distrated from our mission. Although some people would harbor the view that people should wait for a job that would be more satisfying, I personaly believe that we should accept a job immediately as soon as offered to us. I had a stong belief that job should be secured at earlier for several reasons, and would develop these ideas in the subsequent paragrpahs.
To begin with, by securing an opportunity as soon as it is available, we gain additional time to think about the future. To elaborate, sometime when we appear for a job opportunity, we are not sure that whether the referred opportunity is right fit for us. However, after selection, if we accept this job, we get an additional time to think and prepare for next steps including preparation of an English test, advance technical language skills, GMAT exam, etc. I must say that my opinion on this matter is profoundly infleunced by my own experience. For example, after I attended technnial University of Munich, I received an opportunity to work for a financial firm name KPMG as a business analyst. Although, I was not convinced about the role because I was intersted to pursue my carrer in a core automobile domain, I accepted the offer. Afterward, I improved my communication skills and prepared for interviews via Linkedin; consequently, I could secure a job in a renowned automobile group named BMW in Munich. For this reason, I would suggest to take an opportunity as soon as received to plan for a next move.
Secondly, we can repay a loan which was borrowed for an education studies. Nowadays, almost all students take loans for studying abroad due to high fees structure. Later, after graduation, it becomes liability, which needs to re-paid at earliest otherwise the amount keep on accumlating along with its interest. Thus, in case, the job is not taken immediately after the graduation, the same could result into tremendous pressure for students as well as for their family. Drawing from my newphew's experience, who went to Australlia three years ago for studying MBA. After completing his masters, he received specific opportunties from relatively small size companies. However, he did not accept the same. Due to this, till today, after one year of graduation, he could not secure an another job. Whereas, on the hand, the loan he took, keep on moutning. As we can see from this experience, we should secure a job as soon as possible.
In view of reasons mentioned, I would firmly recommend to take a job at earliest. This is because person can gain an additional time for his next steps, and can repay the loan which reduces a liability.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...tended technnial University of Munich, I received an opportunity to work for a fi...
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Line 3, column 1042, Rule ID: ADMIT_ENJOY_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the gerund form: 'suggest taking'.
Suggestion: suggest taking
...BMW in Munich. For this reason, I would suggest to take an opportunity as soon as received to p...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...into tremendous pressure for students as well as for their family. Drawing from m...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...same. Due to this, till today, after one year of graduation, he could not secure ...
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Line 5, column 782, Rule ID: AN_ANOTHER[1]
Message: One of these determiners is redundant in this context. Choose only one: 'a job' or 'another job'.
Suggestion: a job; another job
...year of graduation, he could not secure an another job. Whereas, on the hand, the loan he took...
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Line 7, column 46, Rule ID: ADMIT_ENJOY_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the gerund form: 'recommend taking'.
Suggestion: recommend taking
...ew of reasons mentioned, I would firmly recommend to take a job at earliest. This is because pers...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, however, if, second, secondly, so, thus, well, whereas, as for, for example, in addition, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 9.8082437276 173% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 13.8261648746 36% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 57.0 43.0788530466 132% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 52.0 52.1666666667 100% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2286.0 1977.66487455 116% => OK
No of words: 475.0 407.700716846 117% => OK
Chars per words: 4.81263157895 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.66845742379 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.80282722322 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 253.0 212.727598566 119% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.532631578947 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 725.4 618.680645161 117% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 20.0 9.59856630824 208% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 9.0 3.51792114695 256% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 12.0 4.94265232975 243% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.4124278161 48.9658058833 89% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.25 100.406767564 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.7916666667 20.6045352989 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.33333333333 5.45110844103 98% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.224357934558 0.236089414692 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0665303419982 0.076458572812 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0654398805888 0.0737576698707 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.14816429792 0.150856017488 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0519763922007 0.0645574589148 81% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.1 11.7677419355 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 58.1214874552 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.62 10.9000537634 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.27 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 111.0 86.8835125448 128% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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