Do you agree or disagree with the following statement: it is important to learn about other cultures.
Nowadays, with the unprecedented pace of globalization, the world has become a small village. Based on that, I do agree it is crucial to learn about other cultures. I feel that way for two compelling reasons, which I will explain in the following essay.
First, it broadens our horizons to keep pace with the times. We can learn about different perspectives that may affect our pre-existing thoughts. To be more specific, exposure to new concepts is more likely to rectify some inherited fossilized thinking and not adhere to outdated ideations. For example, several years ago, when I studied in the US, I realized that the vast majority of the students there are financially independent. Unlike the Egyptian cultures, students rely entirely upon their families' money until graduation from universities. My exposure to the American cultures made me revise my old reflections regarding raising children. Therefore, when I returned to Egypt and got married, I raised my children according to my new notions of self-dependence personality. So, they used to get summer jobs and governmental loans that took care of their expenses and tuition fees. If I had never contacted the American culture, I would never have transformed my beliefs to the extent that my children became self-dependent with a tremendously confident personality.
Secondly, another remarkably potential benefit of learning about diverse cultures is the higher likelihood to expand our social networks that may impact our future. In other words, having an in-depth understanding of various cultures enables us to be familiar with radically different cultures and eliminates any possible cultural frictions. For instance, drawing from my own experience back then in the US, I encountered many roommates and classmates who possed drastically different religious, ethnic, and political-cultural backgrounds. Nevertheless, through our daily dealings, we got to know each other better and absorb our differences. Being tolerant and inclusive to distinct cultures left immeasurable impressions on others that I am an open-minded person. Ultimately, we became close friends. We had never had any fight or misunderstanding about our variations. As a result, I built substantial numbers of friendships with people from over the world. A few years later, my English friend classmate offered me a golden opportunity to work with him in his company in India with excellent pay. I got that chance based on my multiple connections with many Indian friends and being open to all cultures, as my English friend revealed later. As you can see, learning about diverse cultures has a positive impact on our social circles and our future.
In a nutshell, I highly recommend learning and getting into contact with diverse cultures. Not only because it transforms our outdated ideas into modern perspectives for our children, but also because it expands our social networks that influence our future.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, may, nevertheless, regarding, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, for example, for instance, i feel, as a result, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 15.1003584229 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 66.0 43.0788530466 153% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 59.0 52.1666666667 113% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2433.0 1977.66487455 123% => OK
No of words: 462.0 407.700716846 113% => OK
Chars per words: 5.26623376623 4.8611393121 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.63618218583 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.99757605891 2.67179642975 112% => OK
Unique words: 265.0 212.727598566 125% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.573593073593 0.524837075471 109% => OK
syllable_count: 781.2 618.680645161 126% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 9.59856630824 0% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.94265232975 20% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 1.0 20.6003584229 5% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 462.0 20.1344086022 2295% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 0.0 48.9658058833 0% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 2433.0 100.406767564 2423% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 462.0 20.6045352989 2242% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 153.0 5.45110844103 2807% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 11.8709677419 8% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88709677419 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.239236848931 0.236089414692 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.239236848931 0.076458572812 313% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0737576698707 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.161106780956 0.150856017488 107% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0910878383087 0.0645574589148 141% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 234.4 11.7677419355 1992% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: -405.91 58.1214874552 -698% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 0.0 6.10430107527 0% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 184.7 10.1575268817 1818% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 14.77 10.9000537634 136% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 31.1 8.01818996416 388% => Dale chall readability score is high.
difficult_words: 133.0 86.8835125448 153% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 56.0 10.002688172 560% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 186.8 10.0537634409 1858% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 187.0 10.247311828 1825% => The average readability is very high. Good job!
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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