Do you agree or disagree with the following statement: it is important to learn about other cultures.
Nowadays, with the unprecedented pace of globalization in our vigorous world, I hold the notion that it is clear as a day that it is critically important for people to learn about other cultures. I feel that way for two compelling reasons, which I will explain in the following essay.
First and foremost, by learning about other cultures, we can perceive things from different views to be reflective to transform our fossilized way of thinking. For example, several years ago, when I studied in the US, I found out that most students there are financially independent, which is entirely different from the Egyptian culture, since parents are obligated to support their children throughout their education. Thus, that ideation reflected on my pre-existing way of thinking regarding supporting my children in the future. Therefore, when I went back to Egypt and got married, I raised my children to rely on their money for their living expenses and tuition fees. Consequently, they got used to having a summer job and government loans to support themselves during their education journey. Had I never learned about other cultures, I would never reflect on my way of thinking to teach my children to be self-dependent.
Secondly, having an in-depth understanding of other cultures will help us make friends with foreigners, which influences our future. Being familiar with different cultures eliminates cultural conflicts. Therefore, I can expand my social network with people from distinct backgrounds without worrying about those conflicts. Drawing from my own experience back then when I was in the US, I understood considerably well about all of my roommates in the dorm and my classmates' cultures; I became a great friend because I was open-minded and tolerant of our differences. We had never had any misunderstanding about their ritual, religious or ethnic backgrounds. A few years later, my English friend offered me a golden opportunity to work in his father's company as a software developer with a huge salary. This opportunity had helped me a great deal throughout my entire carrier. I got plenty of job offers afterward due to my acquired experience in a developed country like Great Britain, as well as my reputation as an open-minded person to all cultures. Currently, I live in Egypt in a spacious house and have my own company.
As you can see, I, like many others who have an in-depth great understanding and exposure to diverse cultures, can easily make friends from all over the world, which will impact their future positively.
In a nutshell, I do agree that it is crucial to learn about diverse cultures. Not only because you will perceive various perspectives to be reflective, but also it will help you to expand your social networks, which influences your future.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, if, regarding, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, thus, well, for example, i feel, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 70.0 43.0788530466 162% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 67.0 52.1666666667 128% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2284.0 1977.66487455 115% => OK
No of words: 458.0 407.700716846 112% => OK
Chars per words: 4.98689956332 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.62611441266 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.88761216211 2.67179642975 108% => OK
Unique words: 229.0 212.727598566 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.5 0.524837075471 95% => OK
syllable_count: 720.9 618.680645161 117% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 9.59856630824 0% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.94265232975 20% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 1.0 20.6003584229 5% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 458.0 20.1344086022 2275% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 0.0 48.9658058833 0% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 2284.0 100.406767564 2275% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 458.0 20.6045352989 2223% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 129.0 5.45110844103 2366% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 5.5376344086 181% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 11.8709677419 8% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88709677419 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.235045775377 0.236089414692 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.235045775377 0.076458572812 307% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0737576698707 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.149071030253 0.150856017488 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0576620219017 0.0645574589148 89% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 231.1 11.7677419355 1964% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: -393.39 58.1214874552 -677% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 0.0 6.10430107527 0% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 181.9 10.1575268817 1791% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 13.14 10.9000537634 121% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 29.87 8.01818996416 373% => Dale chall readability score is high.
difficult_words: 102.0 86.8835125448 117% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 58.0 10.002688172 580% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 185.2 10.0537634409 1842% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 30.0 10.247311828 293% => The average readability is very high. Good job!
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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