Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? It is just as important for older people to study or learn new things as it is for younger people.
Some people think that it is as important for the elderly to learn new things as it is for the young, while others disagree. For me, I agree with the statement. My reasons are as follows.
To begin with, the elderly and the youth all need to learn how to communicate with each other. Therefore, learning how to communicate is equivalently crucial for an elderly person. Take my grandmother as an example. My grandmother spent 4 hours per day studying English and Mandarin. To be more specific, my grandmother often watches many Mandarin movies and memorizes Mandarin characters every so often. She even has a small brochure writing English vocabulary, similar to my TOEFL vocabulary list. Furthermore, she tries hard to learn youth slang and youth cultures. As a result, my grandmother usually has no problems communicating with her grandchildren. On the other hand, my grandfather is stubborn and lazy. He portrays youth culture as disgusting, profane, even inhumane. Not only that, he asserts that every Taiwanese should understand traditional Taiwanese fully (most Taiwanese can only understand Mandarin and English due to historical reasons). That is to say, my grandpa is not willing to pick up Mandarin or English and know even the most common and basic youth parlance. Eventually, his grandchildren usually cannot comprehend a single word that he says. So clearly, learning how to communicate with others, especially the young, is undoubtedly essential to Baby-boomers.
In addition, old people should care about their health, so learning health-related knowledge is also vital for the elderly. Take my grandmother’s sister, Jane, as an example. Jane took several courses about how to exercise for old people. To be more specific, she learned how to exercise regularly without harming her knees. Also, Jane acquired several nutrition facts by browsing through the Health Magazine. For instance, she realized that consuming Zinc and Iron can boost metabolism. Besides, Jane knew how to plan her diet carefully to prevent obesity and diabetes. Eventually, she had not gotten any diseases even though she was 95-years-old. That is, she may have a healthier body than most young people. Contrarily, my grandma’s little brother, Tom, did not care about his health after he retired. He smoked cigarettes, drank alcohol nearly every day, and frequently ate Mcdonald's. Hence, he got hypertension and obesity when he was only 53. What’s worse, he died at the age of 59. If my uncle had acquired some health knowledge after he retired, he would not have deceased so soon. So evidently, learning how to maintain health is extremely important for the elderly.
To sum up, I agree that it is equivalently critical for the elderly to learn new skills and knowledge as it is for young people because the advantages outweigh the disadvantages.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, furthermore, hence, if, may, so, therefore, while, for instance, in addition, as a result, to begin with, to sum up, on the other hand, that is to say
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 49.0 43.0788530466 114% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 52.1666666667 77% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2388.0 1977.66487455 121% => OK
No of words: 460.0 407.700716846 113% => OK
Chars per words: 5.19130434783 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.6311565067 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.94420708978 2.67179642975 110% => OK
Unique words: 252.0 212.727598566 118% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.547826086957 0.524837075471 104% => OK
syllable_count: 733.5 618.680645161 119% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 24.0 9.59856630824 250% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 33.0 20.6003584229 160% => OK
Sentence length: 13.0 20.1344086022 65% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 34.661951364 48.9658058833 71% => OK
Chars per sentence: 72.3636363636 100.406767564 72% => OK
Words per sentence: 13.9393939394 20.6045352989 68% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.0 5.45110844103 92% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 19.0 4.88709677419 389% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.198480122933 0.236089414692 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0546774666801 0.076458572812 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.09490781632 0.0737576698707 129% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.216152503021 0.150856017488 143% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.148477485967 0.0645574589148 230% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.0 11.7677419355 85% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 58.28 58.1214874552 100% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 10.1575268817 83% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.23 10.9000537634 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.92 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 106.0 86.8835125448 122% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 5.5 10.002688172 55% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 7.2 10.0537634409 72% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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