Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? It is more enjoyable to have a job where you work only three days a week for long hours than to have a job where you work five days a week for shorter hours. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
It goes without saying that in today’s progressive world where we live, having a job is an essential role which can effect on our life. Actually, some people prefer to allocate all the days of the week with shorter hours for their career and they spend most of the days on their job. I am of the opinion that working for three days a week for long hours is much important than having a job for five days for shorter hours. The reasons to support my idea are illustrated in the following paragraphs.
To begin with, when you spend long hours in your career, it makes an opportunity to concentrate more and try to do the best on your position. Hence, you working for long hours is a good chance to help you to finish your responsibilities in each day and on the other day you do not encounter with plenty of job that you should did it in the past. Under such a circumstance, you would not be on a stressfull condition.
Furtheremore, when you allocate most of the hours on a day for your career, you have much free time in other days to complete your education or try to learn a new skills that can have effect on your career future. For example, when I worked at a company for three days a week with long time, I could utilize my other days of the week to attend in English class and Computer software class. Therefore, I could handle my jobe and still have a chance to acquire some knowledge in order to develop my abilities.As a result,it help me to improve in my position and promoted as an Administative office on that time.
Having considered the above-mentioend into account, I strongly believe that, doing your job for three days a week for long hours has some advantages for employee. They can focus more and complete their duties in individual day in order to decress their stress. Also, it is a good way to gain a new skill which can make them succesful in their career.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible agreement error. The noun job seems to be countable; consider using: 'plenty of jobs'.
Suggestion: plenty of jobs
...the other day you do not encounter with plenty of job that you should did it in the past. Und...
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Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'skill'?
Suggestion: skill
...te your education or try to learn a new skills that can have effect on your career fut...
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Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: As
...wledge in order to develop my abilities.As a result,it help me to improve in my po...
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Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , it
...rder to develop my abilities.As a result,it help me to improve in my position and p...
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Message: Did you mean 'helps'?
Suggestion: helps
... to develop my abilities.As a result,it help me to improve in my position and promot...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, hence, if, so, still, therefore, for example, as a result, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 15.1003584229 40% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 47.0 43.0788530466 109% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 52.1666666667 98% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1538.0 1977.66487455 78% => OK
No of words: 349.0 407.700716846 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.40687679083 4.8611393121 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.32221490584 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.56410651969 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Unique words: 168.0 212.727598566 79% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.481375358166 0.524837075471 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 476.1 618.680645161 77% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 20.6003584229 63% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 20.1344086022 129% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 48.6140457459 48.9658058833 99% => OK
Chars per sentence: 118.307692308 100.406767564 118% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.8461538462 20.6045352989 130% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.76923076923 5.45110844103 124% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.508910441441 0.236089414692 216% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.17959036282 0.076458572812 235% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.1382488715 0.0737576698707 187% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.324026844029 0.150856017488 215% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0904662872353 0.0645574589148 140% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 11.7677419355 109% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 62.01 58.1214874552 107% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.59 10.9000537634 79% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.55 8.01818996416 94% => OK
difficult_words: 58.0 86.8835125448 67% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.0537634409 123% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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