Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
It is more important for governments to spend money to improve Internet access than to improve public transportation.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer
By and large, it is established beyond doubt that government planning plays a vital role in the development of a state. In this regard, government funding to the deserving departments is of paramount importance. There has been no shortage of debate among scholars whether Internet facilities should get advanced or public transportation should improved. As for writer's opinion, I subscribe to the notion by disagreeing that improvement in Internet access is of more significance than public transportation. In what follows, I will delve into the most crucial reasons to substantiate my viewpoint.
The first compelling reason corroborating my spectrum is that the development of public transportation system requires less money. It is notable that transportation is a means of travelling which comes in invention long before than Internet. The cost of making buses and trains are way less than the proliferation of technology. Therefore, it is crystal clear that the limited funding of government should be utilized intelligently when it comes to needs of people. Moreover, since not all people use Internet, it will be unfair to spend an ample amount on technology. As a case in mind, 10 years ago, the officials of Pakistan got a loan from America and decided to spend that money on an important and basic need of life. They built a transportation system in all rural areas of Pakistan in order to provide the people with the means of travelling. If they had spend that money on Internet, the people would not be satisfy with the government.
The second exquisite rationale behind my opinion is rooted in the fact that public transit reduces unemployment. It is worth mentioning that people need to travel to other areas to earn money. For this purpose, they need a transport and since not all people can afford their own car, they have to rely on less expensive and public transport. If there is no such system, there would be imbalance in a society due to reduced number of employees and the system of the state as a whole would collapse. Vividly, the mentioned point can only be achieved by spending government funding on the development of systems which are more essential. A vivid example can shed more light on this. Last year, I, as a government official signed a petition for improving public transportation in a village in New Mexico. By constructing a local train from village to the city decreased a profound level of unemployment. Thus, I concluded from that instance that public transportation is so important as compared to Internet.
By perusing the above paragraphs, one can infer although Internet has decreased the limitation of the way of communication, the way of transportation is of more value for people. For the sake of brevity, a couple of reasons are worth reiterating; first, a great system of public transport can be built with little expenditure, secondly, it gives an opportunity to do jobs in distant areas. As for the writer's advice, I vehemently urge authorities to spend money smartly. By doing so, a country will prosper.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 852, Rule ID: HAD_VBP[1]
Message: Possible agreement error -- use past participle here: 'spent'.
Suggestion: spent
...ith the means of travelling If they had spend that money on Internet the people would...
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Line 3, column 852, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Use past participle here: 'spent'.
Suggestion: spent
...ith the means of travelling If they had spend that money on Internet the people would...
^^^^^
Line 5, column 617, Rule ID: ESSENTIAL_ESSENTIALLY[1]
Message: Did you mean 'essentially'?
Suggestion: essentially
...e development of systems which are more essential A vivid example can shed more light on ...
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Line 6, column 393, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'writers'' or 'writer's'?
Suggestion: writers'; writer's
... to do jobs in distant areas As for the writers advice I vehemently urge authorities to...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, therefore, thus, as for, as to, by and large
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 15.1003584229 146% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 9.8082437276 173% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 43.0788530466 79% => OK
Preposition: 80.0 52.1666666667 153% => OK
Nominalization: 29.0 8.0752688172 359% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2505.0 1977.66487455 127% => OK
No of words: 509.0 407.700716846 125% => OK
Chars per words: 4.92141453831 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.74984508646 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.97107483499 2.67179642975 111% => OK
Unique words: 239.0 212.727598566 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.469548133595 0.524837075471 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 798.3 618.680645161 129% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 9.59856630824 0% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 1.0 20.6003584229 5% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 509.0 20.1344086022 2528% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 0.0 48.9658058833 0% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 2505.0 100.406767564 2495% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 509.0 20.6045352989 2470% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 87.0 5.45110844103 1596% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 11.8709677419 8% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88709677419 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.332526532674 0.236089414692 141% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.332526532674 0.076458572812 435% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0737576698707 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.211279889382 0.150856017488 140% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.044913441985 0.0645574589148 70% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 256.2 11.7677419355 2177% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: -445.16 58.1214874552 -766% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 0.0 6.10430107527 0% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 201.8 10.1575268817 1987% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 12.74 10.9000537634 117% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 32.51 8.01818996416 405% => Dale chall readability score is high.
difficult_words: 117.0 86.8835125448 135% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 59.0 10.002688172 590% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 205.6 10.0537634409 2045% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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