Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The more money people have, the more they should give away to charity.
In reality, we fairly depend on money and money makes the world go round constantly. Without money, there are a huge number things we cannot complete. In my view, the more money people have, they should not give away to charity. More importantly, they are supposed to take full advantage of these more to do some more meaningful and valuable work.
People should spend the money on education. Education certainly enables us to acquire more knowledge and skills, leading to more success. With living in an information-world, we especially should invest us to gain more undated knowledge. For example, my father has a high-paid job and therefore earns a lot of money. He mostly spends his money on training centers, such as accountant courses. Even though it is exceeding expensive to attend courses, he surely gains more knowledge and improves himself. As a result, he often receives promotions and makes more money.
For present of company, they should spend the money creating more jobs for society. The more positions they generate, the more value the employees creates. In this way, people who have a job not only can support their family, but also make a contribution to company. For example, with the booming of technology, my friend’s technology company creates more profit and my friend becomes more rich. my friend does not spend his money on charity or just enjoy himself, but uses these money to set up another company and therefore generates a huge amount of jobs. These jobs meet the unemployment’ demand and help them make a living. Gradually, my friend’ companies make more profits and make him more rich.
Fro businessmen, they can also spend they money improving employees’ benefits. A successful company relies on the efforts the employees’ make. Given better benefits, employees would work harder and thus have better performance with their jobs since they believe that their employers think highly of them. For example, my father’ boss often awards my father with something like a car. This extremely encourages my father do his best to his work, leading to higher efficiency and creating more profit for his company. Better benefits stimulates workers to have a better performance and ultimately generates unexpected value for company.
In a word, giving away more money to charity indeed gives an assistance to those who are in need. While, it is temporary. Therefore, dedicating money on other things such as education, creating jobs and employees’ benefits, would more meaningful and achieve bigger value.
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- READING 3
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- Renewable sources of energy will soon replace fossil fuels. 71
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: My
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Message: Did you mean 'this money' or 'these moneys', 'these monies'?
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Message: Did you mean 'for'?
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Message: “While” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...an assistance to those who are in need. While, it is temporary. Therefore, dedicating...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...e meaningful and achieve bigger value.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, so, therefore, thus, while, for example, such as, as a result, in my view
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 15.1003584229 33% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 13.8261648746 130% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 11.0286738351 27% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 46.0 43.0788530466 107% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 52.1666666667 79% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2160.0 1977.66487455 109% => OK
No of words: 414.0 407.700716846 102% => OK
Chars per words: 5.21739130435 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.51076378781 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.87419314836 2.67179642975 108% => OK
Unique words: 219.0 212.727598566 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.528985507246 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 679.5 618.680645161 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 17.0 9.59856630824 177% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 20.6003584229 131% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.1344086022 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 33.3022488808 48.9658058833 68% => OK
Chars per sentence: 80.0 100.406767564 80% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.3333333333 20.6045352989 74% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.11111111111 5.45110844103 57% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 20.0 11.8709677419 168% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.363030493873 0.236089414692 154% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.115122666322 0.076458572812 151% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.110890548248 0.0737576698707 150% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.24078488463 0.150856017488 160% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0968269468921 0.0645574589148 150% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.8 11.7677419355 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 56.25 58.1214874552 97% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.4 10.9000537634 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.35 8.01818996416 104% => OK
difficult_words: 104.0 86.8835125448 120% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 10.002688172 60% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.0537634409 80% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.