Do you agree or disagree with the following statement The more money people have the more they should give away to charity

Charity plays a pivotal role in our modern society. The issue regarding charity in this day has never failed to arouse public concerns and at the same time provoke a hotly debate about whether people should donate more to charity if they have more money. Some are inclined to be strong believers in the extreme claim that rich people are not responsible to support charity. Perhaps sound and attractive their argument seems, it can not stand further analysis. Accordingly, I, without hesitation, believe that the wealth people should give away some of their money to charity if they earn more. I feel this way for two reasons, which I will elaborate on in the following passage.

First of all, they are responsible to give back to society. Every rich person own their success to the whole society. The society provide them with workers and loans to help their companies thrive. Now it their turns to benefit the community. This point can be better and further supported by the example of Bill Gates. As a billionaire and entrepreneur, Bill Gates thinks highly of the importance of charity and already decided to donate all his wealth to the charity. He believes that all rich people are obligated to improve the overall warfare and encourage his best friend Buffet to donate all his money too.

Second, charity is beneficial for our whole society, which in turn will help rich people. Only a health society where people can have basic living condition, can they make more progress for this world. In the end, the money contribute to people in poverty will have positive effect for rich people too. For example, if many people get rid of poverty or endure a really hard time in the help of charity, they have more able to consume and increase GDP growth. The healthier the economy, the more money rich people can earn. Obviously, it informs us the rich people should donate more to the charity.

Admittedly, to some extend that the donation may have negative effect on donor's own financial situation. It's understandable that many billionaires are reluctant to donate to charity. However, if we contrast the huge impact charity can bring to this world and their personal reluctance, we realize that it's necessary to persuade rich people to donate their money.

Considering all the viewpoints and example given above, we can safely come to the conclusion that people of wealth should give back to the society, which attribute to their responsibility and the positive effect of charity.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, but, first, however, if, may, really, regarding, second, so, for example, i feel, first of all

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 15.1003584229 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 9.8082437276 153% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 43.0 43.0788530466 100% => OK
Preposition: 53.0 52.1666666667 102% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2074.0 1977.66487455 105% => OK
No of words: 421.0 407.700716846 103% => OK
Chars per words: 4.92636579572 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.52971130743 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.4849919919 2.67179642975 93% => OK
Unique words: 210.0 212.727598566 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.498812351544 0.524837075471 95% => OK
syllable_count: 667.8 618.680645161 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.9289802266 48.9658058833 98% => OK
Chars per sentence: 90.1739130435 100.406767564 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.3043478261 20.6045352989 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.65217391304 5.45110844103 85% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 21.0 11.8709677419 177% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.296203111763 0.236089414692 125% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.088119733218 0.076458572812 115% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0950321668792 0.0737576698707 129% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.163809920607 0.150856017488 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.113293149743 0.0645574589148 175% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.9 11.7677419355 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.31 10.9000537634 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.28 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 100.0 86.8835125448 115% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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