Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Most advertisements make products seem much better then they really are.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
In this progressive and sophisticated world where we lived, there are thousand of hundreds different marks for the same product with different quality and price. Companies have really hard time in competitive with other companies and advertise their own products more than other to get better profit. With in this mind, Some people think that product just show the strong point of the products because they want to make more benefit. Therefore, the products seem better. Other disagree, they believe all the things in the advertisement drives from the product own. In my view, most of the advertisement make products better then they are. The reasons to substantiate my viewpoint are elaborated upon hereunder.
First, most of the advertisement use celebrities and famous people on their products because they recognize that celebrities proponents will believe them. Therefore they will make a huge amount of profit. For example, two years ago, I saw an advertisement in television which advertise a shampoo. The famous football player, washes his hair with it and stuff like this. I have psoriasis, I believed them and bought one of those shampoo after twice time that I used it, it affects my psoriasis ,therefore, I really get in trouble. As you can see how companies use celebrities to make more profit.
Second, some of the advertisements used repeating strategy to confused the costumer to believe them. When you hear the same sentence for several time, you start to believe it. I never can forget the time when we want to buy new house. There was a residential advertisement on TV that time. In regularly repeat easy access to city center by the near by metro station that I really believe them. Fortunately, before we want to bought it, we went to saw it closely. It was the time we understood that metro just goes to another station and you should change line during your way which may take an hour to get in city center by this way.
Third, all the advertisements overlook their products weak points, in some case harmful points. As we all see in the products that where targeted children. Most of them just show the strong point of the products and flamboyant its design. For instance, I want to buy a laptop. I see lots of advertisement in the TV which encourage me to buy them because I think they are wonderful in the price they are. However, When I make some research I understand that it is not suitable for my major because I need very strong one because I have to use some design programs in my laptop.
Consequently, taking aforementioned reasons and examples into account, I believe that advertisement make some exaggeration in showing their products.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, first, however, if, look, may, really, second, so, then, therefore, third, for example, for instance, i think, in my view
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 15.1003584229 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.0286738351 154% => OK
Pronoun: 73.0 43.0788530466 169% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 58.0 52.1666666667 111% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2232.0 1977.66487455 113% => OK
No of words: 456.0 407.700716846 112% => OK
Chars per words: 4.89473684211 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.62105577807 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78067408255 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 216.0 212.727598566 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.473684210526 0.524837075471 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 699.3 618.680645161 113% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 20.6003584229 131% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 41.9929773997 48.9658058833 86% => OK
Chars per sentence: 82.6666666667 100.406767564 82% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.8888888889 20.6045352989 82% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.0 5.45110844103 92% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.5376344086 163% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.23933564354 0.236089414692 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0734600003061 0.076458572812 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0717292310181 0.0737576698707 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.139351673304 0.150856017488 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0734390728828 0.0645574589148 114% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.0 11.7677419355 85% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 58.1214874552 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 10.1575268817 83% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.79 10.9000537634 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.03 8.01818996416 88% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 86.8835125448 86% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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