Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
At universities and colleges, sports and social activities are just as important as classes and libraries and should receive equal financial support.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
I this sophisticated and the progressive world where we live in, universities try to motivate and encourage their students and help them during their frustrating times. Sports and the social activities are the best choice for the universities in my point of view. Event though some people may think universities are supposed to improve the youngster academic field, I believe they have to prepare them to the real life. Therefore, in my point of view sports and social activities are as important as the classes and libraries any they have to get the same amount of the financial aid. The reasons why I have this view are elaborated upon hereunder.
The first reason is that by improving the condition in the sport and social activities, university enable their students to find more friend from different subject areas, so they can broaden their views. For example, I met with by best friend in a social activity where we supposed to clean a park and implant some tress there. During that time, I really faced with some problem in my thesis which is about the guardrail. However, I don't know how to improve it performance by adding a new material to some part of it. I discussed with him while we clean the plastics around us. He suggest that why you don't try plastic material in your design. which change my mind. Finally, I could design a guardrail with a better performance and fewer cost.
Second, they are the heartiest way to get fresh and energy. you you feel tired, you need to do anything which you really love. All of us love to look fit or help to others and get energy if we go to a concert with our friend. Consequently, by adding new sport equipment or adding new social activities. you could have more choice. For example, I usually use university pool after the last construction. Or I love to joint to the new cooking classes which is supposed to began from the next month. Thinking and speaking about them with my friends help me to get energy. I am sure that I will be able to find more friends, If I could cook better foods.
Last, they can prepare student mentally and spiritually to their study. swimming is the first thing that come up in my mind when I feel depress and frustrated. as I swim I can think better and feel free which enable me to get the best decision. If our university didn't repair their old swimming pool, I have to pay lots of money to it. Which in and of itself is an additional problem to me. Also, I am sure that lots of student love and want to use to sport equipment if the university improve their condition.
Consequently, taking aforementioned reasons and examples into account I believe that sports and social activities are as important as the classes and libraries, so they have to get the same amount of the aid.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, consequently, finally, first, however, if, look, may, really, second, so, therefore, while, for example, i feel, speaking about
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 23.0 13.8261648746 166% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 74.0 43.0788530466 172% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 66.0 52.1666666667 127% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2282.0 1977.66487455 115% => OK
No of words: 498.0 407.700716846 122% => OK
Chars per words: 4.58232931727 4.8611393121 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.72397222731 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.58169528839 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 228.0 212.727598566 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.457831325301 0.524837075471 87% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 710.1 618.680645161 115% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 17.0 9.59856630824 177% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 29.0 20.6003584229 141% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 45.2747196326 48.9658058833 92% => OK
Chars per sentence: 78.6896551724 100.406767564 78% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.1724137931 20.6045352989 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.58620689655 5.45110844103 84% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 15.0 5.5376344086 271% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 18.0 11.8709677419 152% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.180697451692 0.236089414692 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0459248496293 0.076458572812 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0489378071511 0.0737576698707 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.112734622529 0.150856017488 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0419031346366 0.0645574589148 65% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.7 11.7677419355 74% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 71.14 58.1214874552 122% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 10.1575268817 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.99 10.9000537634 82% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.86 8.01818996416 86% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 86.8835125448 86% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 10.002688172 145% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.