Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The most important way to improve people’s health is to clean the environment.
Throughout history, health has played a prominent role in all societies. Because it is a paramount importance, scientists have always searched ways for enhancing the health of humans. A controversial question which is often raised this idea is whether the best ways to provoke human's health is having a clean environment or not. I personally contend that having the clean environment is not adequate ways for enhancing the people health; therefore, I disagree with this proposal. In the following paragraphs, I will delve into the most outstanding reasons.
The first paramount factor to be mentioned is that doing regular sports have more influence on people's health rather than having a clean environment. To elaborate on my point, researchers believe that sport has a strong influence on the human's body. When people do exercise every day, they can reduce their stress. Because their body releases morphine during exercise. Therefore, humans would reduce their stress; hence, they may prevent become a depression person. In addition, individuals can prevent some arduous diseases such as heart attack, cancer, blood pressure, and many other similar diseases. On the other hand, the cleaning environment only prevents a few diseases such as respiratory disease. Hence, doing regular sports can better improve human's health rather than clean environments.
Another reason which deserves some worlds here is that eating organic and fresh food is more effective ways than the clean environment. To shed more light on this matter, the most chronic diseases such as concert stem from junk and unhealthy food. The most grains and vegetables are cultivated by toxic materials and dirty water; therefore, they can cause some diseases in the human's body. Also, if individuals eat organic materials like fresh vegetables and fruits, they may prevent some harsh diseases. Considering the previous generation for instance. In the past, people cultivated all essential materials like vegetables, fruit, rice, potatoes, and many other similar items by themselves; hence, they ate healthy foods. Furthermore, they brought up their own sheep and cows, and they consumed fresh and healthy meats and milk. In other words, we hardly see some people who lived in the previous generation had a chronic disease.
To wrap it up, all the aforementioned reasons lead us to the conclusion that only have a clean environment is not an adequate way for improving human's health. I believe that both doing regular exercise and eating healthy food is more effective ways than cleaning the environment for provoking one's healthy.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 21, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[8]
Message: The proper name in singular (paramount) must be used with a third-person verb: 'factors'.
Suggestion: factors
...ng reasons. The first paramount factor to be mentioned is that doing regular s...
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Line 5, column 316, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Because” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...very day, they can reduce their stress. Because their body releases morphine during exe...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, furthermore, hence, if, may, so, therefore, for instance, in addition, such as, in other words, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 43.0788530466 70% => OK
Preposition: 32.0 52.1666666667 61% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 8.0752688172 186% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2205.0 1977.66487455 111% => OK
No of words: 410.0 407.700716846 101% => OK
Chars per words: 5.37804878049 4.8611393121 111% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49982852243 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71545798644 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 217.0 212.727598566 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.529268292683 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 664.2 618.680645161 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.94265232975 202% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 33.7405871492 48.9658058833 69% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.8695652174 100.406767564 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.8260869565 20.6045352989 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.47826086957 5.45110844103 100% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.225750273897 0.236089414692 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0638265698372 0.076458572812 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0632946230939 0.0737576698707 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.147340475031 0.150856017488 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0571017839838 0.0645574589148 88% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 11.7677419355 109% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 58.1214874552 93% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.63 10.9000537634 125% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.06 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 93.0 86.8835125448 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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