Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Movies and television have more negative effects than positive effects on the way young people behave. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Looking back into the history of media, there is no doubt that multimedia industry, specifically movies and television had the most influence on people's lives. No one can deny that there are both positive and negative aspects of the way they affect individual's behavior, especially young people, it is my firm belief that the bright side is more obvious than the other. I definitely believe that these mediums have more positive effects and I will develop this idea in the subsequent paragraphs.
To begin with, behavioral studies is one of the most complex fields in the psychology researches, especially when it comes to studies about the young individuals. There are a wide variety of parameters that can affect young people and how they behave socially and personally. Therefore, with the existence of mediums such as cinema or television, spreading the word and cultures could be very fast and effective. Imagine Martin Luther King's speech for instance, what kind of newspaper or textual medium would have such influence as the TV had by reporting that speech? And is this kind of positive effect is even comparable to any other negative effects of this media on people?
In addition, individuals should take the responsibility of their acts and it is not reasonable to always blame other parameters for behavioral disorders in a society. Movies or television not only do not effect people in a bad way, but they also can teach them the important stuffs that the school and educational systems will never teach. Drawing from my own experience when I was an elementary school student, I remember one of the teachers did not do his job at all. He only tended to blame TV shows for the student's weaknesses but the most important reason was him not doing his job.
In light of the reasons mentioned, although there are always some exceptions which are excluded form a general rule, I strongly believe that movies and other multimedia not only did not bring bad affects, but also they change young people's lives in a positive way.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you mean 'affect'?
Suggestion: affect
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Message: Consider replacing "in a bad way" with adverb for "bad"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...elevision not only do not effect people in a bad way, but they also can teach them the impor...
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Message: Consider replacing "in a positive way" with adverb for "positive"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...ut also they change young peoples lives in a positive way.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, look, so, therefore, for instance, in addition, kind of, no doubt, such as, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 43.0788530466 74% => OK
Preposition: 32.0 52.1666666667 61% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1696.0 1977.66487455 86% => OK
No of words: 344.0 407.700716846 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.93023255814 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.30665032142 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66667230034 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 194.0 212.727598566 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.563953488372 0.524837075471 107% => OK
syllable_count: 539.1 618.680645161 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 20.6003584229 63% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 20.1344086022 129% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 41.7114630988 48.9658058833 85% => OK
Chars per sentence: 130.461538462 100.406767564 130% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.4615384615 20.6045352989 128% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.0 5.45110844103 147% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 11.8709677419 34% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.264930582645 0.236089414692 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0853472404545 0.076458572812 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0565910123239 0.0737576698707 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.153189713379 0.150856017488 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0442113353314 0.0645574589148 68% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.0 11.7677419355 127% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.09 58.1214874552 78% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 10.1575268817 132% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.61 10.9000537634 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.6 8.01818996416 107% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 86.8835125448 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 10.002688172 150% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.0537634409 123% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.247311828 146% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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