Question :Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Movies and television have more negative effects than positive effects on the way young people behave. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Television influence and movies are the most important pillars of each society in today's world. Due to the fact, we live in a chaotic and fast-paced world, it is crucial for us to improve our comprehensive and holistic understanding of Televisions' influence on youth. A controversial question that is often raised regarding this issue is whether television has a negative effect on students rather than a good one, or not. Some people possess the conviction that its negative effects will be more, whereas I think, the positive effects of television is countless. To substantiate my point of view, the following paragraphs represent a cursory glance at the most outstanding reasons.
The first reason coming to mind elucidating my standpoint is that nowadays, there are many useful and beneficial programs on television. Some of the channels are for learning new skills like new languages, and the other provides a wide range of information which are necessary for each individual to know. Consider a program like Investopedia, which gives general information about trading and investment. Its influence on young people is incredible and they do not have to spend money to take a class and learn these skills.
The second rational reason behind this opinion is rooted in the fact that television and audiovisual platforms will bring a situation in that all young people spend their free time with their family members. Watching comedy programs or funny movies will smooth the atmosphere and all members enjoy to attain family gathering. As we all have responsibilities and duties, finding an appropriate time to spend time with our parents is tough, thus, by watching movies, we can improve our relationship and also enjoy movies.
In brief, due to the aforementioned reasons, I think television and movies have an incredible influence on young people because it will help them in learning new skills and makes them spend more time with their family. It is anticipated that improving television programs are encouraging to achieve these goals.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 138, Rule ID: SOME_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: Some
... and beneficial programs on television. Some of the channels are for learning new skills li...
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Line 5, column 293, Rule ID: ADMIT_ENJOY_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the gerund form: 'enjoy attaining'.
Suggestion: enjoy attaining
...l smooth the atmosphere and all members enjoy to attain family gathering. As we all have respon...
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Line 7, column 289, Rule ID: ALLOW_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'achieving'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'encourage' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: achieving
...ing television programs are encouraging to achieve these goals.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, regarding, second, so, thus, whereas, i think, in brief
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 32.0 43.0788530466 74% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 52.1666666667 73% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1723.0 1977.66487455 87% => OK
No of words: 330.0 407.700716846 81% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.22121212121 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.26214759535 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.9324331827 2.67179642975 110% => OK
Unique words: 187.0 212.727598566 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.566666666667 0.524837075471 108% => OK
syllable_count: 533.7 618.680645161 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.6003584229 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.0734656982 48.9658058833 82% => OK
Chars per sentence: 123.071428571 100.406767564 123% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.5714285714 20.6045352989 114% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.85714285714 5.45110844103 89% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.224167124407 0.236089414692 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0710540458603 0.076458572812 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.067109601009 0.0737576698707 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.12540119251 0.150856017488 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0579831420825 0.0645574589148 90% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.9 11.7677419355 127% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 58.1214874552 83% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.29 10.9000537634 122% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.7 8.01818996416 109% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 86.8835125448 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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