Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Movies and television have more negative effects than positive effects on the way young people behave. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
It is often argued about impacts of television and movies on the young people behavior. Some people believe that their negative effects are more than their positive effects. Personally, I disagree with this idea. I feel this way for two reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
To begin with, people are able to think and do not get influenced in negative way easily. This is not important what is showing on TV or in a movie, people always decide how to behave, some may choose negative points, some may choose positive points. My personall experience is a compelling illustration of this. When I was doing my major, I used to see a lot of movies in my free times. Some movies had violent content and some had very beneficial content about making a strong relationship with other people. I did not affected by the violent movies because I had ability to understand violence is not acceptable. On the other hand, I started to become kind to my roommates by using words which I had learnt from other movies.
Another equally noteworthy point supporting this opinion is that watching television or movies is fun and can help young people overcome their stress, which eventually ends in a more appropriate behavior. Young people are more likely to get stressed out due to today complicated life, so, they need to have an outlet to relieve themselves from stress of daily life. If they cannot relieve themselves, they would act aggressively. Television and movies can be a good option in order to achieve this important. For example, in past years, I often thought about my economic problems and got stressed out; at the times, I could not control myself and talk to people in a inappropriate tone. But I learnt how to manage this misbehavior. I started to watch a fun movie everytime I felt nervous. In this way I could control my anxiety and avoid resenting my friends.
In conclusion, I believe that television and movies effects on the young people are mostly positive rather than negative because they can pick what they learn from TV and films and fun pragrams can help them behave in a better way.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 201, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to negative'
Suggestion: to negative
...s decide how to behave, some may choose negative points, some may choose positive points...
^^^^^^^^
Line 2, column 201, Rule ID: AFFORD_VBG[1]
Message: This verb is used with infinitive: 'to negative'.
Suggestion: to negative
...s decide how to behave, some may choose negative points, some may choose positive points...
^^^^^^^^
Line 2, column 521, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'did' requires the base form of the verb: 'affect'
Suggestion: affect
...lationship with other people. I did not affected by the violent movies because I had abi...
^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 665, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...ot control myself and talk to people in a inappropriate tone. But I learnt how to...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, may, so, for example, i feel, in conclusion, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 47.0 43.0788530466 109% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 52.1666666667 94% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1749.0 1977.66487455 88% => OK
No of words: 369.0 407.700716846 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.73983739837 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.38284983912 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.62456855561 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 195.0 212.727598566 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.528455284553 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 557.1 618.680645161 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.0267856842 48.9658058833 108% => OK
Chars per sentence: 87.45 100.406767564 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.45 20.6045352989 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.3 5.45110844103 79% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.85842293907 233% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.269826576112 0.236089414692 114% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0751542248403 0.076458572812 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0672165935802 0.0737576698707 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.186171674603 0.150856017488 123% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0681850188042 0.0645574589148 106% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.1 11.7677419355 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 58.1214874552 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.21 10.9000537634 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.61 8.01818996416 95% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 86.8835125448 83% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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