Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
One of the best ways that parents can help their teenage children prepare for adult life is to encourage them to take a part-time job.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Children play an essential part in our society because they build our future. Although some people would harbor the view that parents should not motivate their children to opt for a part-time job, I believe that parents must encourage their children to opt for a part-time job in today's fast-moving world. I had a firm belief that parents should guide their children to take a part-time job for several reasons, and develop them in the subsequent paragraphs.
To begin with, children can gain experience while performing part-time jobs, which means that this rich experience facilitates their resume enabling them to secure a full-time job after graduation. Furthermore, students receive a golden opportunity to work in a real-time situation. As a result, their ability to cope with the complicated situation in full-time assignment improve. I must say that my experience profoundly influenced my opinion on this matter. For example, after I attended my school, I went to Munich to pursue a Bachelor's in Mechanical and Automation Engineering. In addition to my full-time studies, I did a part-time job in an Automobile shop. Consequently, the referred experience helped me secure a job in a renowned German automobile company Skoda, Germany. As we can see from this example, part-time expertise helps to ensure full-time employment after graduation.
Secondly, part-time jobs make students independent in the future. To elaborate, while performing a part-time job, students earn money, which they can utilize as per their discretion. Accordingly, in the beginning, they might commit specific mistakes, but in the long run, they learn to spend in the right areas. Drawing from my brother's experience, when he was 14 years old, one of the renowned advertisement firms came to their school to find the suitable students for shooting a commercial advertisement. As my brother was quite handsome and extrovert, he was selected and did the ad. Afterward, he earned around five hundred dollars, which he has invested in one system investment plan. Consequently, today, after fifteen years, he made approximately ten thousand dollars. For this reason, a part-time job helps students to become independent in the future.
Given the reasons mentioned, I firmly propose that parents motivate their children to opt for part-time jobs as these not only help children gain experience for a full-time job, but also make them independent.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, also, but, consequently, furthermore, if, second, secondly, so, while, for example, in addition, as a result, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 3.0 15.1003584229 20% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 13.8261648746 43% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 48.0 43.0788530466 111% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 52.1666666667 81% => OK
Nominalization: 18.0 8.0752688172 223% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2048.0 1977.66487455 104% => OK
No of words: 384.0 407.700716846 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.33333333333 4.8611393121 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.4267276788 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.00821718959 2.67179642975 113% => OK
Unique words: 205.0 212.727598566 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.533854166667 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 631.8 618.680645161 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 8.0 3.51792114695 227% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.2338055724 48.9658058833 99% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.4 100.406767564 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.2 20.6045352989 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.8 5.45110844103 125% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.295401624586 0.236089414692 125% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0950840499735 0.076458572812 124% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0831850488716 0.0737576698707 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.212614432038 0.150856017488 141% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0588602883076 0.0645574589148 91% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.3 11.7677419355 113% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 58.1214874552 90% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.63 10.9000537634 125% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.61 8.01818996416 107% => OK
difficult_words: 98.0 86.8835125448 113% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 10.002688172 130% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 71.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.5 Out of 30
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