Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The opinions of celebrities, such as famous entertainers and athletes, are more important to younger people than they are to older people. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
In regard to the modern lifestyle and the presence of technology that facilitates data sharing, more celebrities are renowned all
over the world. Although they have some effects on adults, they seem to be more influential on youngsters, Some reasons can
explain this fact which I will mention in the subsequent paragraphs.
First and foremost, the people in their twenties normally are at the begining of their independant life journey. Hence they do not
have enough experience and wisdom to build up their approach and as a result they are much more susceptible to accept others
oppinion, so if they are a fan of a clebrity they will also follow their approach and it is important for them to know their apinion
because helps them to follow them better. I have to admit that my opinion on this matter has been profoundly influenced by my
own personal experience. When I was 17 years old, I was a huge fan of Shakira, and even though she was a singer from a
different country with deifferen culture, I always tended to act and behave like her. I was always searching for more detail on
her apinion so I could know her better which helped me be more like her. But when I got more older and could build up my
own approach of life, I quit following her opinion because then she was just a singer to me and I followed just her songs.
Secondly, the fact that most celebities just show their positive aspects of their charachter is approved by many scholars and also
adult people, but the people in their twenties are more likely to be feigned by renowned. As a result, they follow their opinion
as a perfect person. I believe this is because they do not have a strong sence of distinguishing reality from feigned
phenamenous. But when they grow in society they normally enhance this ability so when they get to be adults they have
attained more wisdome and normally can distinguish that celebrities, despite the manifested picture of them in the society, have
some imperfections in their character and their opinion do not worth to be followed.
In light of above mentioned reasons, I agree that young people follow the opinion of celebrities more often than adults, because
they are more infulenced by the manipulated perfect charachter of celebrities which is visible in the society. Also they have not
formed their own approach in their twenties yet, so the opinion of celebrities can be more imppressive for them.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 113, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Hence,
...ning of their independant life journey. Hence they do not have enough experience and...
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Line 10, column 89, Rule ID: MOST_COMPARATIVE[2]
Message: Use only 'older' (without 'more') when you use the comparative.
Suggestion: older
...ped me be more like her. But when I got more older and could build up my own approach of ...
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Line 19, column 112, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Also,
...rities which is visible in the society. Also they have not formed their own approac...
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, hence, if, second, secondly, so, then, as a result, in regard to
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 15.1003584229 146% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 67.0 43.0788530466 156% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 52.0 52.1666666667 100% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2027.0 1977.66487455 102% => OK
No of words: 422.0 407.700716846 104% => OK
Chars per words: 4.80331753555 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.53239876712 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.64946819631 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 197.0 212.727598566 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.46682464455 0.524837075471 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 633.6 618.680645161 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.6003584229 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 30.0 20.1344086022 149% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 75.7831560091 48.9658058833 155% => OK
Chars per sentence: 144.785714286 100.406767564 144% => OK
Words per sentence: 30.1428571429 20.6045352989 146% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.85714285714 5.45110844103 107% => OK
Paragraphs: 20.0 4.53405017921 441% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.196049674839 0.236089414692 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0792947417911 0.076458572812 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0537305185564 0.0737576698707 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0684432583712 0.150856017488 45% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0539689720282 0.0645574589148 84% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.2 11.7677419355 138% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.49 58.1214874552 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 10.1575268817 136% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.15 10.9000537634 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.49 8.01818996416 106% => OK
difficult_words: 90.0 86.8835125448 104% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.002688172 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.0 10.0537634409 139% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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