As is known to all, to judge whether a man is mature or not, you ought to assess his ability to make decisions for his future. Unfortunately, due to the social pressure and personal problems, it's hard for children today to make decisions alone. Therefore, I incline to the statement that parents can determine their children's future.
The main reason for my propensity is that parents have so much experience so that they invariably do good to the decisions their children make. It is the general truth that parents have duty and responsibility to take care of their children and to protect them from hurt. However, faced with the soaring house price, the low employment rate and the high tax policy, hardly can these parents still pretend to have natural ease. Their responsibilities require them to raise the money, to better prepare for children's education and even to determine their children's majors and careers. As far as I am concerned, what they do is for the kids' own good. Since children haven't stepped into the society yet, most of their judgments are based on the illusion, which is unattainable and unrealistic. They have no idea how cruel the society is and hard the life will be. Conversely, parents' accumulated experiences in the past are able to tell the right from the wrong and prevent those children from making the same mistakes again. Therefore, parents are needed to determine their children's future.
Besides, children can't stand on their feet yet. It is a general truth that children nowadays are less independent. Such problem could be even more serious in China. Due to the family planning policy, each family in China is allowed to raise only one kid. Therefore, not only parents but also grandparents spoil this only child. They wash clothes for him, cook meals for him and even make beds for him. Consequently, this child tends to rely on others. Whenever he is confronted with troubles, he turns to others for help. Neither would he solve the problems alone nor have a try. Gradually, young men today lose the ability to make decisions for their own lives and that's why we need our parents.
In short, it would be better for parents to determine their children's future than for children to make their own decisions.
- Why go to university? 76
- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Parents should allow children to make their own choices rather than determine their children’s future for them. 73
- Why go to university? 90
- The extended family is less important now than it was in the past. 76
- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? It is often not a good thing to move to a new city or a new country because of the lost of old friends. 76
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: haven't
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Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
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Suggestion: that's
... make decisions for their own lives and thats why we need our parents. In short, i...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, consequently, conversely, however, if, so, still, therefore, in short
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 44.0 43.0788530466 102% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 52.1666666667 77% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1871.0 1977.66487455 95% => OK
No of words: 385.0 407.700716846 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.85974025974 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.4296068528 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.5779714739 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Unique words: 214.0 212.727598566 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.555844155844 0.524837075471 106% => OK
syllable_count: 579.6 618.680645161 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 37.629574501 48.9658058833 77% => OK
Chars per sentence: 81.347826087 100.406767564 81% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.7391304348 20.6045352989 81% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.86956521739 5.45110844103 71% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.435399436988 0.236089414692 184% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.123723582867 0.076458572812 162% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.117287989956 0.0737576698707 159% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.308789378966 0.150856017488 205% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.113085115685 0.0645574589148 175% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.8 11.7677419355 83% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 58.1214874552 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 10.1575268817 83% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.61 10.9000537634 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.47 8.01818996416 93% => OK
difficult_words: 74.0 86.8835125448 85% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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