Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? In the past people ate food that was better for their health than they do today. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Throughout history, food has played a prominent role in all societies. Because it is of paramount importance, researchers have always searched for ways to enhance the quality of foods. Whether or not the previous generation consumes healthier food that new generation, is controversial. I contend that people in eaten healthier food than in this era. So, I agree with this proposal. In the following paragraphs, I will delve into the most outstanding reasons.
The first important factor to be mentioned is that the previous generation was producing their food. To elaborate on my point, people in the past cultivated many vegetables such as potatoes, rice, tomatoes and other vegetables they needed by themselves. In other words, each family produced their food materials. Also, the soil which they produced their vegetable and the weather were cleaner than tody. Besides, they had a plentiful and clean water resource for cultivating vegetable. Therefore, their vegetable became organic and they were healthier than today. Because, today, soil, water and weather are polluted so that the vegetable which cultivates in this soil become polluted. In addition, the previous generation grew their chickens, cows and ships. In this situation, they had able to eat healthier meat, milk and eggs than today. Indeed, people in the past eat organic and healthy food.
Another reason which deserves some words here is that humans in the past had free times for cooking their food at home, but today individual does not have adequate time for cooking food and eat healthy food. To shed more light on this matter, in the past, fathers and boys had worked out their home, and mother and daughters worked at their home. In these situations, women cleaned their home and cooked their food. So, the previous people were eating healthy food which prepares in their home. In contrast, to days both fathers and mothers are working out of their home so that they would not have time for cooking their food. In this situation, people prefer to buy food out of their home. Thus, they eat fast food and junk food. These foods cause many hard diseases like blood pressure and obesity. To wrap it up, in the past people eat healthier food than today.
All in all, considering the aforementioned reasons lead us to the conclusion that people in the past eat healthier food than today. I believe that the previous generation not only cultivated their vegetable and produced their food but also cooked their food at home so that they consumed healthier food than the new generation.
- TPO 43 Integrated Writing Task 90
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- TPO 30 80
- TPO 30 80
- Some people like to buy and eat their meals at restaurants frequently while others like to do this at home. Which do you prefer? Why? 70
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 186, Rule ID: WHETHER[7]
Message: Perhaps you can shorten this phrase to just 'Whether'. It is correct though if you mean 'regardless of whether'.
Suggestion: Whether
...r ways to enhance the quality of foods. Whether or not the previous generation consumes health...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, first, if, so, therefore, thus, in addition, in contrast, such as, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 9.8082437276 20% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 13.8261648746 145% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 51.0 43.0788530466 118% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 52.1666666667 98% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2162.0 1977.66487455 109% => OK
No of words: 425.0 407.700716846 104% => OK
Chars per words: 5.08705882353 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.54043259262 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.51861883389 2.67179642975 94% => OK
Unique words: 204.0 212.727598566 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.48 0.524837075471 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 634.5 618.680645161 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 15.0 4.94265232975 303% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 20.6003584229 131% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.1344086022 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 42.3173716709 48.9658058833 86% => OK
Chars per sentence: 80.0740740741 100.406767564 80% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.7407407407 20.6045352989 76% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.74074074074 5.45110844103 69% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 12.0 4.88709677419 246% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.261459163713 0.236089414692 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0894065776978 0.076458572812 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0452896692741 0.0737576698707 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.180077370934 0.150856017488 119% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.033293832774 0.0645574589148 52% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.4 11.7677419355 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 64.71 58.1214874552 111% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.0 10.1575268817 79% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.95 10.9000537634 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.46 8.01818996416 93% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 86.8835125448 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 10.002688172 60% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.0537634409 80% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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