Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
In the past, young people depended too much on their parents to make decisions for them; today young people are better able to make decisions about their own lives.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
People, throughout their lives, face many different situations where they have to make decisions, and the younger they are, the more challenging it gets. As far as I am concerned, I totally believe that nowadays, young people are better able to make decisions in their lives in comparison to the past. The reasons why I believe so will be elaborated upon hereunder.
First, in the past, because of the cultural and financial situations, young people were more dependent on their parents. Youngs always lived with their parents, and living alone was not really an option for them, especially for girls. Also, because the parents, more specifically the father, were the provider of the house and made money, he felt that he had to make all the decisions. As a result, youngs did not have so much independence and power to make their own decisions. That is why parents even chose their boys' or girls' spouses. My own example illustrates this reality. About fifty years ago, when my father was young, he lived with his parents. He worked with my grandfather in his shop too. He was dependent on his father so much that my grandfather decided on everything in his life. My grand forced my father to join the army and even chose a wife for him.
Second, the sources of information were very limited back then, and youngs did not know too much about essential matters in life. There was no internet, and books were almost rare. Their only source of valuable information was their parents. I mean, if they wanted to choose a job, they could not decide whether it would be good for them. They had to turn to their parents for advice, and their parents eventually said the last word. In contrast, nowadays, people can easily attain accurate and reliable information through various mediums. For instance, if someone wants to be a pilot, he or she does not get information from their parents. They get information from online sources and many available books. They even can find some real pilots on the internet and ask about the job from them.
In conclusion, with all this taken into account, I strongly believe that in the past, young people were more dependent on their parents in making decisions than today. I think it was because of financial and cultural situations. Also, there was not enough information for young people to make their decisions based on them.
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- TOEFL T P O 44 Integrated Writing Task 3
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 38, Rule ID: NUMEROUS_DIFFERENT[1]
Message: Use simply 'many'.
Suggestion: many
People, throughout their lives, face many different situations where they have to make deci...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, if, really, second, so, then, for instance, i mean, i think, in conclusion, in contrast, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 58.0 43.0788530466 135% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 49.0 52.1666666667 94% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1953.0 1977.66487455 99% => OK
No of words: 408.0 407.700716846 100% => OK
Chars per words: 4.78676470588 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49433085973 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.48515271091 2.67179642975 93% => OK
Unique words: 205.0 212.727598566 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.502450980392 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 599.4 618.680645161 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 17.0 9.59856630824 177% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6003584229 121% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 34.9456721212 48.9658058833 71% => OK
Chars per sentence: 78.12 100.406767564 78% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.32 20.6045352989 79% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.52 5.45110844103 83% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 15.0 4.88709677419 307% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.393488348618 0.236089414692 167% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.110770303736 0.076458572812 145% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.106811561659 0.0737576698707 145% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.266040992118 0.150856017488 176% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.085875710216 0.0645574589148 133% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.3 11.7677419355 79% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 58.1214874552 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 10.1575268817 83% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.21 10.9000537634 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.22 8.01818996416 90% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 86.8835125448 83% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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