Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? People behave differently when they aren’t in health. Do you agree that health status influences the way people behave?
Today in an urbanized world people are leaving a more stressful life because of stress people are having various health problems which they never faced before. Health problems affect people in various ways, but also affects behavior. I believe people behave differently when they are not healthy. I will elaborate on my reasons in the ensuing paragraphs.
First, today, technology has gained such a presence in our lives that it’s easy to become addicted to social media and smartphones. Children get easily get addicted to devices such as phones, tablets, laptops, etc. As a result, they become the prey of numerous health problems. One of them is obesity, it is the biggest health problem faced by the young generation. Obese children are more concern about their looks and they lose their temper very easily when someone makes comments on their looks. Most of the obese children are a victim of depression. Thus, they try to overcome their problem by wrong approaches such as drugs, suicides, etc. The young generation is more addicted to social media and its effects their sleep as well. Nowadays children are facing a problem of not able to focus on their studies because of the lack of sleep, and that even affects their behavior.
Second, technology brought facilities, however, it also brought a lot of stress in people’s lives. Because of the technology people work after their work hours from home. That does not give them required rest from work which brings stress in their life. Stress affects the body, thoughts, feeling, and behavior. Not only that stress can bring various illnesses, such as high blood pressure, heart disease, obesity, and mental illness. when someone is suffering from a mental illness, they behave differently. For instance, research study illustrations that most of the criminals are a victim of mental illness. Moreover, mental illness can lead to behavior that may be bizarre and confusing. As an example, any kind of phobias, in that people have a fear of any particular thing. Such as, acrophobia is a disease in which a person is afraid of heights. Further, ordinary health issues also affect people's behavior. If a person is having a fever, then he/she prefer to rest. The most common behavior change is feeling lazy.
Let's put in a nutshell, illness brings various changes in a person's behavior such as anxiety, stress, depression, etc. Because of health issues, a person's daily routine also changes that also affects behavior. I strongly believe that health can influence people's behavior and bring changes in their behavior.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, look, may, moreover, second, so, then, thus, well, for instance, kind of, such as, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 38.0 43.0788530466 88% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 52.1666666667 88% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2162.0 1977.66487455 109% => OK
No of words: 424.0 407.700716846 104% => OK
Chars per words: 5.09905660377 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.53775939005 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.52126502433 2.67179642975 94% => OK
Unique words: 212.0 212.727598566 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.5 0.524837075471 95% => OK
syllable_count: 648.9 618.680645161 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 29.0 20.6003584229 141% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 20.1344086022 70% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 28.6300358649 48.9658058833 58% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 74.5517241379 100.406767564 74% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.6206896552 20.6045352989 71% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.31034482759 5.45110844103 79% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 11.8709677419 34% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 19.0 3.85842293907 492% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.158019683533 0.236089414692 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0488149719033 0.076458572812 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.068184106505 0.0737576698707 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.117426831954 0.150856017488 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0681399658796 0.0645574589148 106% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.9 11.7677419355 84% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 65.73 58.1214874552 113% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 10.1575268817 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.71 10.9000537634 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.13 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 102.0 86.8835125448 117% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.6 10.0537634409 76% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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