Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? People benefit more from traveling in their own country than from traveling to foreign country.
Travel is one of the most favorite plan in people life. Many people save their money to travel to other parts their never seen. some people are inclined toward the idea that it is more beneficials for people to travel in their own country. However, other may take an opposite viewpoint and believe that there are more advantages in travelling to foreign countries compater to travel in their own country.
The first reason to point is that people can improve their perspective about life situation in other counteries. Any country have a different culture, food and its own language .When a person travel to specific country, he is going to learn about their language, culture and their foods which is a valuable experience for him to enhance his knowledge about other people. Therefore, he gains a excellent sense about the countries in the world. For example, One of my cousins traveled to France two years ago. He learned that France is one of the most developed countries in Europe. The people of France main interest was wine, fashion and industry. Therefore, he enhances his knowledge and imporved his information which was really helpful for him.
A furthure more subtle reason is that it is an unforgetful experience for everyone. There are prominent memories in the mind of every people which can not be forget. Travelling to a foreign country is one of the best memory of many people which many people done it and suggest it. Therefore, its memory will going to be with you and chear you up when you are tired or you are facing trouble. Since many people travelled with their family when they were a child or teenager, travelling in their own country is not a unique experience for them. They prefer to do something that they never done it. For example, my grandfather tells a story about travelling to Canada all the time since it was one of it faciniating experience. It does not matter when he was sad or happy, he always remmember his trip and it always change his mood, when he think about it.
To make a long story short, based on the aforementioned paragraph, there are more benefits in travelling to another country because not only it enrchies our understanding of the world we live in, but also it is one of the best experience we can try it.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Some
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Suggestion: .
...erent culture, food and its own language .When a person travel to specific country...
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Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: When
...ent culture, food and its own language .When a person travel to specific country, he...
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Line 3, column 392, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...about other people. Therefore, he gains a excellent sense about the countries in ...
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Message: The verb 'will' requires the base form of the verb: 'go'
Suggestion: go
... suggest it. Therefore, its memory will going to be with you and chear you up when yo...
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Message: Did you mean 'changes'?
Suggestion: changes
...always remmember his trip and it always change his mood, when he think about it. To ...
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Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'thinks'.
Suggestion: thinks
... and it always change his mood, when he think about it. To make a long story short,...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, may, really, so, therefore, for example
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 15.1003584229 159% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 57.0 43.0788530466 132% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 51.0 52.1666666667 98% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1871.0 1977.66487455 95% => OK
No of words: 398.0 407.700716846 98% => OK
Chars per words: 4.70100502513 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.46653527281 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.54548283069 2.67179642975 95% => OK
Unique words: 188.0 212.727598566 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.472361809045 0.524837075471 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 604.8 618.680645161 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 56.345363607 48.9658058833 115% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.55 100.406767564 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.9 20.6045352989 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.5 5.45110844103 64% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.312499180153 0.236089414692 132% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.104523015751 0.076458572812 137% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0902926777343 0.0737576698707 122% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.207424803106 0.150856017488 137% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.107163557979 0.0645574589148 166% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.7 11.7677419355 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 58.1214874552 104% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.98 10.9000537634 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.2 8.01818996416 90% => OK
difficult_words: 66.0 86.8835125448 76% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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