Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
People learn things better from those at their own level-such as fellow students or co-workers-than from those at a higher level, such as teachers or supervisors.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Education plays an important role in our lives. In the current world, it is the key factor to predict our future lives. Some people, I am sure would believe people learn things better from those at their own level-such as fellow students or co-workers rather than from high level, such as teachers or supervisors and others would deny the statement. I prefer the former statement and will provide two reasons of support why I feel that way in the following paragraphs.
To begin with, peers do influence us a lot. It is because we spend most of the time with them. For example, we generally make friends in the school, where we spend most of our times. As we become friends, we regularly spend time in the evening and as well as in the weekends pursuing our interests. This leads to starting point of resemblance. As we spend most of the time with our friends, we start to resemble and influence each other. Though teachers are essential, they are only confined to preach all must achieve success. Rather, they can not influence our core values because we do not spend most of the time with them. In contrast, when we have a studious friend, we start to imitate his features like studying on time, doing home works regularly, being attentive in the classes and many more.
Further, friends encourage a competitive environment. An intrinsic property of a human being is to do well than their friends in any aspect of live. This feature leads us to strive for it very hard and achieve desired goal. My personal experience is a compelling example of this. Back in my childhood, I had a friend who works very hard to top the class in examinations conducted by the school. As we were friends, I stared to resemble him and work hard for the examinations. I tried very hard to my fullest abilities like studying most of the time and reciting what I had read than ever before to crack score in examination above him. I did this inorder to get praised by my teachers and fellow friends and show what I am capable of. In contrast, teachers just provides the technical information required in a subject to be learnt by a student. Rather, they fail to encourage competition among students.
In conclusion, I support the statement that people learn better from their social equivalents rather than from higher levels such as teachers or supervisors. Not only does social peers influence us a lot, they does initiate feeling of competition in out minds which leads us to enhance in our lives.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 58, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to better', 'to well'
Suggestion: to better; to well
...support the statement that people learn better from their social equivalents rather th...
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Line 4, column 210, Rule ID: NON3PRS_VERB[2]
Message: The pronoun 'they' must be used with a non-third-person form of a verb: 'do'
Suggestion: do
...s social peers influence us a lot, they does initiate feeling of competition in out ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
so, well, for example, i feel, in conclusion, in contrast, such as, as well as, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 58.0 43.0788530466 135% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 64.0 52.1666666667 123% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 8.0752688172 198% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2045.0 1977.66487455 103% => OK
No of words: 437.0 407.700716846 107% => OK
Chars per words: 4.67963386728 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.57214883401 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.61889891092 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 228.0 212.727598566 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.521739130435 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 625.5 618.680645161 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 20.0 9.59856630824 208% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6003584229 121% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 45.2853000432 48.9658058833 92% => OK
Chars per sentence: 81.8 100.406767564 81% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.48 20.6045352989 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.72 5.45110844103 68% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 19.0 11.8709677419 160% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.232024969915 0.236089414692 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0549070062012 0.076458572812 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.122588064681 0.0737576698707 166% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.178572006298 0.150856017488 118% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.151153610389 0.0645574589148 234% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.4 11.7677419355 80% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 71.14 58.1214874552 122% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 10.1575268817 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.57 10.9000537634 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.8 8.01818996416 97% => OK
difficult_words: 92.0 86.8835125448 106% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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