Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Some people say that the internet provides people with a lot of valuable information. Others think access to so much information creates problems. Which view do you agree with?
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Technology and internet plays an important role in our lives. It can be either ways, productive or destructive based on our perceptions. Some people believe that the internet provides us a lot of valuable information whereas, others think access to so much information leads to problems. In my view, I am completely oriented towards former statement for two reasons which I will mention in the following essay.
To begin with, righteous usage of internet helps to enhance our lives. Earlier, people were not aware of the opportunities they can grab and can lead a successful life. Where as now, due to the exposure and lot of information on internet, people can know many ways to survive financial desires efficiently. My personal experience is a compelling example of this. My father who studied Agricultural Bachelors remained unemployed for a long period of time because he is unaware of opportunities around different places in my country, India. Whereas, considering my case, I did my undergraduation in petroleum engineering. Since my grades were poor, I was not placed during campus placements held in the campus during seventh semester of the college. Then, by my friend I came to know about Linkedin, an online platform which provides information about job opportunities available all over the world. Then, I applied most of the opportunities, undergone interviews, wrote back to recruiters about declaration of results, and finally got my job. Though, my initial job paid me low pay scale, I was happy about the fact that I got my job immediately after my graduation unlike waiting for job opportunities by my father.
Further, we can enhance our skills to infinite extent through the vast sources available in the internet. Though we may be involved in other works we can gain our desired skills free time because world wide web has no break. I mean, internet is always open for accessing information 24*7 any time. For instance, as I mentioned above, my intial payscale was small, I want to upscale my salary. Inorder to obtain my desired salary, I decided to upgrade my education qualification. I was unable to quit my job for education because my financial position was not stable. Then, I surfed online about possible ways and came up with a solution. I simply enrolled for online Master's program in Indiragandhi open university, so that I can upscale my knowledge in the free time without quitting my job. After my online master's completion, I added it to my resume and along with the experience gained from my job I got a job in ONGC, my most favorite company.
In conclusion, Internet provides people with a lot of valuable information. Not only does it enhances our lives but it also does enhance our skills.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, if, may, so, then, whereas, for instance, i mean, in conclusion, in my view, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 65.0 43.0788530466 151% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 63.0 52.1666666667 121% => OK
Nominalization: 23.0 8.0752688172 285% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2279.0 1977.66487455 115% => OK
No of words: 458.0 407.700716846 112% => OK
Chars per words: 4.97598253275 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.62611441266 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.95003699857 2.67179642975 110% => OK
Unique words: 253.0 212.727598566 119% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.552401746725 0.524837075471 105% => OK
syllable_count: 742.5 618.680645161 120% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 19.0 9.59856630824 198% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6003584229 121% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 36.8944440262 48.9658058833 75% => OK
Chars per sentence: 91.16 100.406767564 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.32 20.6045352989 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.4 5.45110844103 81% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.5376344086 144% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 11.8709677419 143% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.138549259882 0.236089414692 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0550568464701 0.076458572812 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0902607081937 0.0737576698707 122% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.134076015407 0.150856017488 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0827155794932 0.0645574589148 128% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.2 11.7677419355 95% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.6 10.9000537634 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.74 8.01818996416 109% => OK
difficult_words: 122.0 86.8835125448 140% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 86.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 26.0 Out of 30
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