People learn things better from those at their own level—such as fellow students or co-workers—than from those at a higher level, such as teachers or supervisors. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. Be sure to use your own words. Do not use memorized examples.
Some people believe that learning is much easier and faster, when we are taught by people the same age and status as we are, rather than by the authority and mentors. Personally, I disagree with this statement because supervisors’ and professors’ serious approach and their correct method of teaching are the things that make learning better.
To begin with, chiefs and teachers have more experience communicating with people, so presenting information, they use accessible words and examples, which could be also based on their past failures. Talking about peers, they do not have the same amount of knowledge and the things people try to learn from them can be confusing and complicated because of incorrectly chosen expressions. Even if the topic is clear, I recently became convinced that some details may be missed. While going to school, I often have to turn to fellow students for help. Surprisingly, professors explain the subject much better: no slang words, abbreviations and removal of necessary information. If I hadn’t asked the teacher for help, my understanding of the subject would have remained low.
Furthermore, superiors have more influence and respect, so subordinated people listen to them with more perseverance and concentration, which are required, while learning things. Classmates and co-workers make studying flexible, but in fact, it is a difficulty, which may take a long time, because of the general lack of seriousness to the case. Accordingly, my sister would never have learned how to manage computer files if it wasn’t her boss, who quickly taught her how to handle the work. Here, the status of a superior did not allow my sister to talk about household chores and fun, which she did with colleagues, who because of the conversations did not really help her.
In conclusion, I believe that it is teachers and authority that give the opportunity to receive education more efficiently. Their correctly chosen words and the ability to keep student’s focus retained really helps people on their way of becoming professionals.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 336, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to better', 'to well'
Suggestion: to better; to well
...ching are the things that make learning better. To begin with, chiefs and teachers ...
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Line 2, column 15, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...t make learning better. To begin with, chiefs and teachers have more experience...
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Line 2, column 417, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...expressions. Even if the topic is clear, I recently became convinced that some de...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, also, but, furthermore, if, may, really, so, while, in conclusion, in fact, talking about, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 43.0788530466 72% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 52.1666666667 71% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1739.0 1977.66487455 88% => OK
No of words: 332.0 407.700716846 81% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.23795180723 4.8611393121 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.2685907696 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.96614877235 2.67179642975 111% => OK
Unique words: 199.0 212.727598566 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.599397590361 0.524837075471 114% => OK
syllable_count: 526.5 618.680645161 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.6003584229 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.6608091388 48.9658058833 79% => OK
Chars per sentence: 124.214285714 100.406767564 124% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.7142857143 20.6045352989 115% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.35714285714 5.45110844103 153% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.141297496066 0.236089414692 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0462833744147 0.076458572812 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0340360792053 0.0737576698707 46% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0875797525885 0.150856017488 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0350060976737 0.0645574589148 54% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.1 11.7677419355 128% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 58.1214874552 83% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.41 10.9000537634 123% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.72 8.01818996416 109% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 86.8835125448 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.002688172 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 88.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 26.5 Out of 30
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