It is critically important for people to relax as much as possible during their leisure time since people live in a fast-paced society where they receive many pressure and need some ways to relieve presure. This leads many believing that people should relax with activities or hobbies that are not related to their job. In my opinion, this is absolutly true because doing activities that are not job related is just more relaxing and beneficial.
To begin with, job-related hobbies and activities often remind people of their job, which is often full of pressure. However, hobbies and activities that are not job-related allows people to escape from their busy jobs and take a break, which better relieves people from their stress. For example, both of my parents are biology teachers, and although it is true that they love their job, they would still felt stressful if they continue to do job-related activities after work. They would sometimes read history book, but just not biology books. No matter what kind of activity they are going to do, teach me or go out for a stroll, they just do not want to touch biology-evoled things even though they do love their jobs. It is pretty obvious from this example that hobbies or activities that is not related to work is simply more relaxing.
Moreover, having a hobbie that is not connected with job can also improve the scope of people’s horizon, which is something job-related hobbies or activies cannot provide. These hobbies and activities can teach people many valuable techniques and experiences, which would even benefit them in their own field of study. For example, college students in my city are require to join a club of different topic. Take a music major students as an example, he or she may join a literature club, and this would be really beneficial because music is essentially expressing one’s experience and knowedge in the form of notes. So, students who had a widerange of knowedge are going have more thoughts in how to uniquely perform their pieces, which is going create better music; the same apply to every major. Consequently, college students in my city had been the best and brightest in each of field because of this. If students did not have been involved in activies ouside of their major, they would have not only perform worse in their field but also loss many unique experiences.
In conclusion, people should have hobbies and activities that is different from their job because it is more relaxing and can prompt new understanding to the world.
- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement Many people nowadays spend too much money on their pets dogs cats or other animals although there are better uses for their money 72
- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement Because our society today is just so busy and crowded we should not expect people to be polite to one another 76
- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement Because our society today is just so busy and crowded we should not expect people to be polite to one another 85
- do you agree or disagree with the following statement People should take time to relax with hobbies or physical activities that are very different from what they do at work 73
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 155, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun pressure seems to be countable; consider using: 'many pressures'.
Suggestion: many pressures
...a fast-paced society where they receive many pressure and need some ways to relieve presure. ...
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Line 5, column 365, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'required'.
Suggestion: required
...xample, college students in my city are require to join a club of different topic. Take...
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Line 5, column 373, Rule ID: ALLOW_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'joining'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'require' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: joining
...college students in my city are require to join a club of different topic. Take a music...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, however, if, may, moreover, really, so, still, for example, in conclusion, kind of, in my opinion, it is true, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 15.1003584229 159% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 13.8261648746 145% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 48.0 43.0788530466 111% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 52.1666666667 90% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 8.0752688172 12% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2113.0 1977.66487455 107% => OK
No of words: 430.0 407.700716846 105% => OK
Chars per words: 4.91395348837 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.55372829156 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.53873081231 2.67179642975 95% => OK
Unique words: 210.0 212.727598566 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.488372093023 0.524837075471 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 657.0 618.680645161 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.1344086022 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 40.8640246685 48.9658058833 83% => OK
Chars per sentence: 124.294117647 100.406767564 124% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.2941176471 20.6045352989 123% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.76470588235 5.45110844103 161% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.260250158558 0.236089414692 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0962162578587 0.076458572812 126% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0693393453423 0.0737576698707 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.186320407144 0.150856017488 124% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0700997341375 0.0645574589148 109% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.3 11.7677419355 122% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 58.1214874552 94% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.49 10.9000537634 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.48 8.01818996416 93% => OK
difficult_words: 71.0 86.8835125448 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.002688172 120% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.0537634409 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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