Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Playing computer games is a waste of time. Children should not be allowed to play them. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Some people argue that video games are a part of our lives now and children should not be deprived from this. They cite the happiness and excitement of children to play video games to support their argument. However, I strongly disagree with these people and believe that children should not be allowed to play video games. I will support my reasons in following paragraphs.
First of all, children gets very addicted towards video games and it significantly affect their studies. My personal example is the best case to study here. Till my senior secondary class, I was a topper and scored good marks to get admitted to one of the prominent Indian university. But in college, as I got introduced to laptop, I stuffed it with various vidoe games and suffered badly in my very first semester. If I had been carefull enough with video games, I could have better grades to continue in same university for my master program. Childrens’ brain is not mature enough to weigh personal enjoyment and carrer and in the influence of video games, they often ignore their very career. So, I think that children should not be allowed to play video games.
Second, computer, laptop, or mobile phone screen are bery harmful for our eyes. Many individual casually using laptop even end up with having powered spectacles and children could have far worse effects. For example, today it is very easy to find a kid with powered spectacles and we often hear from their parents that he or she use too much phone to play video games. If the children were taught to play outdoor games insead of video games, they could have not only better sight but physical health. It is also important to understand that video games not only effect children’s eyes, but also their brain functioning. Also, other violent and sexual depiction in these vidoe games can not be ignored which cause negative effects on them.
To conclude, it is very complex to decide that whether children should be allowed to play video games. Some people suggest to restrict their video game playing time with strict supervision from their parents. But, I still contend that children should not be allowed to play video game, especially for the reason of their addiction and negative effects on their physical and mental health.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, second, so, still, for example, i think, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 13.8261648746 130% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 47.0 43.0788530466 109% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 52.1666666667 86% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1891.0 1977.66487455 96% => OK
No of words: 389.0 407.700716846 95% => OK
Chars per words: 4.86118251928 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44106776838 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.380360006 2.67179642975 89% => OK
Unique words: 202.0 212.727598566 95% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.519280205656 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 584.1 618.680645161 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 32.5720739284 48.9658058833 67% => OK
Chars per sentence: 94.55 100.406767564 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.45 20.6045352989 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.2 5.45110844103 77% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.27785488851 0.236089414692 118% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.103162829159 0.076458572812 135% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0776886026525 0.0737576698707 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.207879559248 0.150856017488 138% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0784310262659 0.0645574589148 121% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.2 11.7677419355 95% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 58.1214874552 104% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.91 10.9000537634 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.03 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 85.0 86.8835125448 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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