Professional sports events are enjoyed everywhere around the world. Have you ever dreamed of being paid to do what we love? How would you charge yourself if this happens? Salaries is not only for making a living but als o an approvement(approval) for ones hardwork(hard work). Personally, I agree professional athletes diserve(deserve) high salaries to be paid.
First of all, good training costs a lot of money. Training for professional athletes involves sports technique practicing, body building, diet planning…and so on. Since they are professional level, they are confronting with the best players in the world. Not only the equipment in these programs costs (them) money, athletes need coaches to help them develop their full potential. Above all, these expenses will be higher for them to experience preferable quality of training. However, if athletes don’t own higher salaries, it will be more difficult for them to get to their next stage of their sports careers. Without advanced equipment, athletes may be stuck in a level for a longer period. Furthermore, they may not find that they had been playing in a wrong way, just because they could not afford to hire a more talented coach. These contributes (contribute) to the depression of their salaries.
In addition to necessary expenses, professional athletes bring the most benefits to the sports industry. Training an athlete is like making a superstar. As the athletes’ fame become stronger and bigger, more people watch them on TV, buy tickets to see them play in person, and even buy products the athletes endorse to show their affection . These are the main sources of incomes for the sports industry. Without athletes, how would this industry even exist? Athletes are those who bring the most profits therefore they deserve high salaries. (They are the reason why teams receive sponsors and commercial incomes.) In(By) contrast, lower salaries diminish athletes’ will to push themselves to the best version. So sports fans would no longer spend their money to support (on supporting) the athletes, which eventually lead to the collapse of the sports industry. Thus, only through giving professional athletes high salaries can the sports industry survive.
Undeniably, some people might claim that it is unfair for professional athletes to own high salaries. For one thing, playing sports as a living may seem to be an unreachable career, making great money from it is asking too much. In addition, instead of giving particular players high salaries, teams could use these(this) money to invest in new young players. However, professional players have to take a lot of risks from being injured and they do bring a lot of benefits to their teams. Therefore, it is indeed worthwhile that they own high salaries.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, furthermore, however, if, may, so, therefore, thus, while, in addition, first of all, for one thing
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 13.8261648746 43% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.0286738351 45% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 42.0 43.0788530466 97% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 52.1666666667 100% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2339.0 1977.66487455 118% => OK
No of words: 449.0 407.700716846 110% => OK
Chars per words: 5.20935412027 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.60321845022 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.86453409049 2.67179642975 107% => OK
Unique words: 237.0 212.727598566 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.527839643653 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 693.9 618.680645161 112% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 29.0 20.6003584229 141% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.1344086022 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 35.3718483762 48.9658058833 72% => OK
Chars per sentence: 80.6551724138 100.406767564 80% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.4827586207 20.6045352989 75% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.8275862069 5.45110844103 70% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 14.0 5.5376344086 253% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 11.8709677419 143% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.183265765264 0.236089414692 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.054212731052 0.076458572812 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0624138725829 0.0737576698707 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.131418690855 0.150856017488 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0569517821446 0.0645574589148 88% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.8 11.7677419355 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 64.71 58.1214874552 111% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.0 10.1575268817 79% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.64 10.9000537634 116% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.97 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 102.0 86.8835125448 117% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 5.5 10.002688172 55% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.0537634409 80% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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