In the past several decades, the world has gone through considerable changes on both an individual and a societal level. In the past competed-oriented society, the most important thing to do is achieve success. On the other hand, the debate over whether achieving success is more important than keeping happy and optimistic when you fail is still fierce today. I believe that the most important thing is to stay happy and hopeful.
To begin with, people who can keep happy and optimistic have a stronger will. In my opinion, keeping happy and optimistic is the precondition to succeed. As an old saying goes, “No cross, no crown.” When people want to achieve their goals, they inevitably conflict with setbacks. Massive expectations from superiors and extensive competition among colleagues strain their nerves and exhaust them. They may devote a significant amount of time to a project or a representation but easily lose a big contract just because they failed to persuade one of their clients. All of these could dampen their motivation and hinder them from achieving further success if they cannot stay optimistic. An optimistic person will bounce back quickly from those huge failures and restart their flight.
Moreover, nowadays, companies work increasingly involves teamwork, and people who cannot stay optimistic when they fail can never achieve goals as a team. Teamwork requires cooperation, which means people need to communicate with their coworkers, get along with them, and exchange their real thoughts. They need to deal with plenty of barriers and complex problems and may fail frequently. Imagine that due to admitting a tiny mistake, an individual feels hopeless and rejects to continue his part of the work. In that case, the process of the whole team would be affected and cannot work in the company’s best interest.
In a nutshell, it is undoubtedly more important to remain happy and optimistic even when you fail for the reasons discussed above.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, may, moreover, so, still, in my opinion, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 15.1003584229 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 13.8261648746 130% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 43.0788530466 63% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 52.1666666667 77% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1664.0 1977.66487455 84% => OK
No of words: 320.0 407.700716846 78% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.2 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.22948505376 4.48103885553 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77388596726 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 195.0 212.727598566 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.609375 0.524837075471 116% => OK
syllable_count: 496.8 618.680645161 80% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 28.5399010432 48.9658058833 58% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 97.8823529412 100.406767564 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.8235294118 20.6045352989 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.82352941176 5.45110844103 88% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.315878088354 0.236089414692 134% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.097979116468 0.076458572812 128% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.113643794935 0.0737576698707 154% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.22621940117 0.150856017488 150% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.117337407063 0.0645574589148 182% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.5 11.7677419355 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.88 10.9000537634 118% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.28 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 76.0 86.8835125448 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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